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Martie
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0 posted 1999-12-04 08:26 PM


Sentry of the Heart


Stand down sentry of the heart
your watch has ended.

You listen
for permission from
the descendants of time.
Long dead they leave their
obituary of condemnation,
a fingerprint that no one sees
but you.

The soft fingers that beguiled
the child still build blockades
to keep passion in.

The bad hand has been gone
nigh forty years
and scars are not
a sacred treasure.
Who do you keep them for
but yourself
to stoke the sadness you admit
only when twilight has stripped you
and night has folded you in.

Stand down sentry of the heart
your watch has ended
your vigilance has mocked
the perfection of this minute.

Stand down
or light the way.


© Copyright 1999 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Ohme
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1 posted 1999-12-04 08:29 PM


Very good Martie!
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2 posted 1999-12-04 09:29 PM


Oh, Martie - I like this a whole bunch.
It keeps calling me back for another read.
I like it a whole bunch-a-lot.


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3 posted 1999-12-05 08:31 PM


Very well done, Martie! To live in the past robs the pleasure of the present and the hope of the future. I like this very much.

 Denise


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4 posted 1999-12-05 08:44 PM


The last two lines say it all, Martie. Beautiful job.
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5 posted 1999-12-05 08:56 PM


Martie - you are a poet of light.
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6 posted 1999-12-05 08:56 PM


And might I add - it is exceptionally bright!

[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 12-05-1999).]

Martie
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7 posted 1999-12-06 12:09 PM


Thankyou for your comments Ohme, and Marge,a whole bunch from you fills me up, Balladeer-you're right about the last lines and Severn-you shine.


There is a light
behind the blackness
deep inside
the cave of see
sometimes red
and sometimes purple
a kaleidoscope
I made for me

It is there
to light the darkness
turn the rancor
flay the thief
just behind the turn of eyelash
is the door to close out grief

Seaangel
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8 posted 1999-12-06 03:12 PM


Found this lost on page 2, but such a gem, Martie! It happens along at exactly the right time for me, those lines: "stand down, sentry of the heart, stand down or light the way."
Holding past hurts but hopeful, demanding another chance.  This touched me deeply.


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