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Bottled Dreams

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RobertB
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0 posted 12-02-1999 11:40 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for RobertB

Bottled Dreams


In a life of turmoil
from day one and through
the struggle on the soil
in the mind of a youth
not asking a change of circumstances
only for the door of opportunity
not necessarily second chances
just a semblance of normalcy
in a world that offers
excesses by the carton load
from venders opening coffers
selling maps to a life on the wrong road
and promises of dreams succumbed
to the last drop at the bottom of a bottle
for an intellect so numbed
by life at Wide Open Throttle
and no brakes.

RB
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poetFemmeFatale
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1 posted 12-03-1999 12:10 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Ooohh, I liked this! What a powerful message too! The title is what caught my eye.....very thought provoking - - thank you for sharing!! I liked this alot.

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Excellent - gripping actually.
Nan
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I personally like the line about "selling maps to life on the wrong road...".... How very true....
Ohme
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Oh, I like this a lot. Favorite line;


selling maps to a life on the wrong road.

Very well done!
RobertB
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5 posted 12-03-1999 12:09 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

wow....you guys make me think....how to do it again...I really appreciate all your kind comments!!

Robert
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A lot of effort in this one Robert....liked.
RobertB
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7 posted 12-03-1999 06:38 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

thanks UK....it was from a true life experience. :-}

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