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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Severn, To make up for my blundering blunders, I'm writing you a little poem live, as I'm posting, SEVERN, Severn, goddess of the sea Island queen of poetry Stands upon New Zealand's shore And whispers songs of nevermore The song is heard around the world And heartstrings' arms are then unfurled They wrap around the Island Queen And warm her most exquisite dream Like willowy branch in summer breeze She sways in beauty's gentle please She sings her poetry to the wind With all the wonder kept within Her words like silver ripples shine And catch the eye of space and time A child of inner loveliness A beautiful golden poetress Love ya, Elizabeth |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is beautiful, Elizabeth! Amazing to be able to write on the spot like that! I envy your talent. ------------------ Denise |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Elizabeth is right Severn so far but not so far--although your blunder was not that bad the poem is wonderful and true Elizabeth. |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
I wish I could do that  You did it well  |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
This is very beautiful, and I know she will be very happy to read it, what an honor!! I can't wait till she sees it !! Great job! ------------------ ~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thank you all, I hope she likes it too, and wasn't she a good sport? She's a sweetheart Liz |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
WOOOOOWWW! What a surprise this was to wake up to! Thankyou hon!!!! I'm going to print this off straight away. I'm just stuttering here. All I can say is that I feel deeply honoured (NZ 'U' ) and very touched. That you think that much of my poetry also deeply honours me, Liz. And I agree - great writing for on the spot. Here are heaps of 's for you and a few hugs!!Sincerely, Kamla. (But you can call me K) |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Kamla, Now we have a lovely name behind the happy faces. I loved your WOW. It made me so happy that you liked the poem.Thank you for your thank you. You're a dear Liz |
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Willem Member
since 1999-11-18
Posts 139Inverness, FL, USA |
What a gem of a poem! Smooth and natural flowing, well rhymed, just the right touch of nostalgia, vivid description. And free of the excessively introspective psychology display that often renders modern poetry so boring. Willem |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth, my friend ... a sparkling gem ... for a sparkling Severn. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Severn, Lovely for the lovely. One beautiful poem from a wonderful poet. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow...I think you said something bad about me too....lol. Very nicely written Elizabeth and for a very sweet person too |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Willem, Very nice words you have, sir. Thank you much. I appreciate it Marge, So small a gem for our dear little SEvern Sy,Glad you liked this lullaby But you just threw sand in my eye Sometimes you make me cry And I simply don't know why Hoot Glad you liked the verse, she is very sweet Liz |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I just read all these responses and now I want to cry - what is about you people!! |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
We're just one big Passionate family, Severn... Now about the poem - This being impromptu, I may have to be jealous of the ones you spend some time composing, ya think??? |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Severn, You're allowed to cry all you want Nan, if you want see impromptu, read Severn's response to "Delicious Sorrow" This will really make you jealous Liz |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
What a wonderful poem on the spot for a wonderful person! Good writing! Severn, we're just caring people that care for you!!! ------------------ <*\\\>< Jesus is the reason for the season |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
White dove ever gently coos New Zealand's poetress she soothes Thank you, Whtdove |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Liz...a good one!!! and to Willem....welcome....you will not see my tirades here. Robert ------------------ if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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U K Hero Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 266England |
loved the read...excellent |
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