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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 12-02-1999 10:40 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Severn,
To make up for my blundering blunders, I'm writing you a little poem live, as I'm posting,

SEVERN,

Severn, goddess of the sea
Island queen of poetry
Stands upon New Zealand's shore
And whispers songs of nevermore

The song is heard around the world
And heartstrings' arms are then unfurled
They wrap around the Island Queen
And warm her most exquisite dream

Like willowy branch in summer breeze
She sways in beauty's gentle please
She sings her poetry to the wind
With all the wonder kept within

Her words like silver ripples shine
And catch the eye of space and time
A child of inner loveliness
A beautiful golden poetress

Love ya,
Elizabeth
© Copyright 1999 Elizabeth Santos - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 12-02-1999 11:02 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is beautiful, Elizabeth! Amazing to be able to write on the spot like that! I envy your talent.



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Denise

Martie
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2 posted 12-02-1999 02:13 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Elizabeth is right Severn so far but not so far--although your blunder was not that bad the poem is wonderful and true Elizabeth.
Ohme
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3 posted 12-02-1999 02:19 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

I wish I could do that You did it well
poetFemmeFatale
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4 posted 12-02-1999 02:38 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

This is very beautiful, and I know she will be very happy to read it, what an honor!! I can't wait till she sees it !! Great job!

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~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale

Elizabeth Santos
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5 posted 12-02-1999 03:27 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Thank you all, I hope she likes it too, and wasn't she a good sport? She's a sweetheart
Liz
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6 posted 12-02-1999 06:03 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

WOOOOOWWW!
What a surprise this was to wake up to!
Thankyou hon!!!!
I'm going to print this off straight away.
I'm just stuttering here. All I can say is that I feel deeply honoured (NZ 'U' ) and very touched.
That you think that much of my poetry also deeply honours me, Liz.
And I agree - great writing for on the spot.

Here are heaps of 's for you and a few hugs!!
Sincerely, Kamla. (But you can call me K)
Elizabeth Santos
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7 posted 12-02-1999 06:33 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Kamla, Now we have a lovely name behind the happy faces. I loved your WOW. It made me so happy that you liked the poem.Thank you for your thank you.
You're a dear
Liz
Willem
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8 posted 12-02-1999 08:10 PM       View Profile for Willem   Email Willem   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Willem

What a gem of a poem! Smooth and natural
flowing, well rhymed, just the right touch
of nostalgia, vivid description. And free
of the excessively introspective psychology
display that often renders modern poetry so boring.

Willem
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9 posted 12-02-1999 08:15 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Elizabeth, my friend ...
a sparkling gem ...
for a sparkling Severn.


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Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 12-02-1999 08:20 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Severn,
Lovely for the lovely. One beautiful poem from a wonderful poet.
hoot_owl_rn
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11 posted 12-02-1999 08:56 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Wow...I think you said something bad about me too....lol. Very nicely written Elizabeth and for a very sweet person too
Elizabeth Santos
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12 posted 12-02-1999 10:49 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Willem,
Very nice words you have, sir. Thank you much. I appreciate it

Marge, So small a gem for our dear little SEvern

Sy,Glad you liked this lullaby
But you just threw sand in my eye
Sometimes you make me cry
And I simply don't know why

Hoot
Glad you liked the verse, she is very sweet
Liz
Severn
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13 posted 12-03-1999 02:38 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

I just read all these responses and now I want to cry - what is about you people!!
Nan
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14 posted 12-03-1999 07:31 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

We're just one big Passionate family, Severn...

Now about the poem - This being impromptu, I may have to be jealous of the ones you spend some time composing, ya think???
Elizabeth Santos
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15 posted 12-03-1999 10:03 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Severn, You're allowed to cry all you want

Nan, if you want see impromptu, read Severn's response to "Delicious Sorrow"
This will really make you jealous
Liz

WhtDove
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16 posted 12-03-1999 10:29 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

What a wonderful poem on the spot for a wonderful person! Good writing!
Severn, we're just caring people that care for you!!!

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Jesus is the reason for the season

Elizabeth Santos
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17 posted 12-03-1999 12:40 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

White dove ever gently coos
New Zealand's poetress she soothes

Thank you, Whtdove
RobertB
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18 posted 12-03-1999 12:46 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

Liz...a good one!!!

and to Willem....welcome....you will not see my tirades here.

Robert

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U K Hero
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19 posted 12-03-1999 01:35 PM       View Profile for U K Hero   Email U K Hero   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for U K Hero

loved the read...excellent
 
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