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Balladeer
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0 posted 12-01-1999 11:39 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer


When I am gone
and not around
I want no mound
to mark the ground
where I lay still
but let me be
alive and well
in memories

of those I touched
and knew me well
my wish is such
a place to dwell
and let them feel
me in the breeze
that keys the move-
ment of the trees

and let me rest
in Waldon's Pond
then to the stars
and far beyond
I'll be a part
of nature's plan
inside the heart
of every man

and let them see
me in the eyes
of lovers' glee
and baby's cries
for I will be
in all these things
in rains that fall
in birds that sing

and this will be
my epitaph
'he laughed to live
and lived to laugh
and laughed at life
he never dropped
until the day
the laughter stopped'

then I will rest
a restful sleep
I did my best
now trust my keep
to He above
who shows the way
to endless love
for this I pray.
© Copyright 1999 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth
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1 posted 12-01-1999 11:45 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Makes for both a good poem and a good prayer, Balladeer.
Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 12-01-1999 11:53 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

BEAUTIFUL POEM!!
IT'S WONDERFUL! AS ARE YOUR TALENTS
liz
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3 posted 12-02-1999 12:05 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Well we already feel you in the breeze of your words!
Was beautiful Balladeer! Really beautiful!
John Yaws
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4 posted 12-02-1999 12:07 AM       View Profile for John Yaws   Email John Yaws   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit John Yaws's Home Page   View IP for John Yaws

Beautiful, my friend. A whole new dimension hitherto unexpected.
Poet deVine
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5 posted 12-02-1999 12:10 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Oh, I like this...a departure from what you usually write...I love the format and the way it flowed from line to line, stanza to stanza!
Martie
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6 posted 12-02-1999 12:12 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

This is beautiful. The bard, the balladeer, lives on in hearts, his words told and told again, an echo of the past into the future.
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7 posted 12-02-1999 12:18 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Sweet Balladeer -
Your laughter will be heard on the winds of sweet memories.
This is really very sentimentally beautiful.


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8 posted 12-02-1999 12:27 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

My friends, I thank you for your wonderful thoughts.....I appreciate you all.
hoot_owl_rn
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9 posted 12-02-1999 04:29 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Applauds!!! wonderful Balladeer, this is so smooth it practically reads itself.
Severn
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10 posted 12-02-1999 06:26 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

dear 'deer - we're all going to Poet Heaven you know...
I have to agree with PdV and Ruth - it's one of those poems that has written itself. Bravo - many roses etc. K
Toerag
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11 posted 12-02-1999 07:03 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

And when I stand,
At your graveside,
I'll think of you,
then fertilize,
The flowers above,
From where you lay,
Cuz Toerag will follow ya,
to the grave!

Okay, seriously, this was a very well done poem Balladeer...and you'll be remembered when you're gone I'm sure....(Like now? I'm always thinking of something I can say about ya?)

[This message has been edited by Toerag (edited 12-02-1999).]
Nan
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12 posted 12-02-1999 07:08 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

M&M - I have only these words for you - from my Great-Grammie McGraw - Alice K Martin (1878-1967)

When I have left this mortal shore
And mosey 'round the earth no more,
Don't cry, don't weep, don't sob ~
I may have struck a better job.

Don't go and buy a large bouquet
For which you find it hard to pay.
If you have roses, well, bless your soul
Just pin one in my button-hole
While I am here and well today.
Don't wait until I've gone away.
sraet
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13 posted 12-02-1999 07:44 AM       View Profile for sraet   Email sraet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sraet

As always, I loved your post. Sentiments so many of us can relate to, definitely the way I would like to be remembered...
Deb Lynne
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14 posted 12-02-1999 08:28 AM       View Profile for Deb Lynne   Email Deb Lynne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Deb Lynne

MM, you will live on in the hearts of all of us! Now stop making me cry at work!
Sunshine
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15 posted 12-02-1999 09:03 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Because of you, and in memory of you, when it's time, we will all dance...

Marvelous, as always, Sir 'Deer.

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Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

Lynn
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16 posted 12-02-1999 09:26 AM       View Profile for Lynn   Email Lynn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lynn


You never fail to touch me deeply with your words. Even though I don't know you very well, your words will always stay with me. Great poem.

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If time cannot heal your pain, you can always cry on my shoulder. ~Jenn~
Sally S.
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17 posted 12-02-1999 10:41 AM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

I've no doubt that you will be treasured and felt inside the hearts of the many you have touched with you kindness and sincerity. Your words will last long after we've become one with nature.
Though, I hope you're not planing on leaving me for quite some time.
Sad, touching poem, my dear...
Denise
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18 posted 12-02-1999 11:04 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is beautiful, Balladeer. It is a lovely poem and prayer. Well done.

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Denise

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19 posted 12-02-1999 11:24 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Bal: Wonderful as always..

HUSG

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Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream...
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20 posted 12-02-1999 11:28 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Let's hope it'll be a long, long time before you need an epitaph, 'Deer one... Great poem!
Marilyn
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21 posted 12-02-1999 01:17 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

You will be remembered well my friend. I echo suthern. I hope you don't need these words for a very long time!
Iloveit
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22 posted 12-02-1999 02:33 PM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

Mr. Balladeer you have gained a special place in my memory and in my heart for writing such wonderful poems as this and for theman that you are
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23 posted 12-02-1999 02:49 PM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Not that my opinion means much...but, you're right Lovey and the rest of you....I can't imagine this place with out this man. He's kind of an icon here...I love to tease and bother him.....(and Longjohn), but he's gone off into never never y2k land, but there's few people on this earth that can reach into the depths of someone's heart..into their very soul like this guy can.....But, I kinda think he'll be around for quite sometime however....long after I'm dead and gone anyhow.....(which, with my temperment and mouth could be as soon as tomorrow), but, he'll be killin' roaches and makin' rhymes for a long long time me thinks...I will miss him, and all the rest of the crazies here....I just hope one of his employees doesn't mistake him for a palmetto bug and sprays the hell outta him....(I have heard he's been spotted in a few roach hotels however)...Or was that Roach infested hotels?....(Where he probably has the contract).....Yall be good to him now ya hear? He's really a pretty good old (very old) punkster.. yanno....despite what nature's done to him.......

[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 12-02-1999).]
Nan
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24 posted 12-02-1999 04:23 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Did I happen to mention that I like the poem, Deer?
 
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