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I Surrender

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Marilyn
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0 posted 12-01-1999 08:45 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Marilyn

I surrender to your will.
To your touch,
And to your skill.
I give you everything and more,
You touch me to my very core.
I'll be to you,
Just what you need.
You've sowed in me,
A precious seed.
You give to me,
All I could dream.
You even cover,
With whipped cream.
What I really want to say,
You complete me every day.
So close your eyes,
Take my hand.
Together,
We'll find the promised land.


[This message has been edited by Marilyn (edited 12-01-1999).]

[This message has been edited by Marilyn (edited 12-01-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Marilyn - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
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1 posted 12-01-1999 08:52 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Smiles...for someone who said she didn't think she could love....sounds like you got the idea down pretty good my friend

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"When you come to the edge of the light which is all you know. And are about to step off into the darkness that is unknown...Faith is knowing one of two things will happen...there will be something to stand on...or you will learn how to fly." -Unknown
Kevin
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2 posted 12-01-1999 08:55 PM       View Profile for Kevin   Email Kevin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kevin

lol im sorry but from such a beautiful poem all i can think about is varsity blues and the whip cream bikini
ah well sweet dreams tonight, balladeer would understand =)
Ohme
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3 posted 12-01-1999 09:00 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

aaaahhh, Liked it.
Denise
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4 posted 12-01-1999 09:03 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Sounds good to me! Great poem, Marilyn!

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Denise

Marilyn
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5 posted 12-01-1999 09:25 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Ruth my friend....I love very deeply. The trouble is; I don't love ones accessable...lol.

Kevin...LMAO...what a picture you left in my head!

Thanks Ohme.

Denise....Thanks my friend.
RobertB
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6 posted 12-01-1999 09:30 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

good poem Marilyn....liked the style. I did.

RB
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8 posted 12-05-1999 07:28 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Lovely Marilyn.
Love can be hard - understatement of the year! (Millenium?)
caroline
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9 posted 12-05-1999 03:07 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Very beautiful, Marilyn  

 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain

Seaangel
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10 posted 12-05-1999 03:31 PM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seaangel

lovely
can I ask what you do with the whipped cream?
(LOL)
Marilyn
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11 posted 12-06-1999 12:48 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Robert..Thankyou.

Severn....definately the understatement of the millenium!!

caroline....Thankyou  

Seaangel...the reference wasn't meant to be sexual in nature...lol. It was meant more in getting everything you want with whipped cream on top. :0
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12 posted 12-06-1999 01:46 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

Very beautiful...and I really dig the word-art picture of a vase.  

The scheme had me a little baffled until I read it outloud...then all became clear.  I can see the tetrameter, but there is some variance between iambic and trochiac...or it could be just me.  

Thank you for posting this.

Alicat  

 The Persnikitty


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13 posted 12-06-1999 02:01 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I like this very much!  
Kitty**
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14 posted 12-06-1999 02:24 PM       View Profile for Kitty**   Email Kitty**   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kitty**'s Home Page   View IP for Kitty**

WOW..this I like and it's one I can identify
with..

seem to love the unaccesable too!!! ;-(
Pepper
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Beautiful indeed Marilyn!!

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!


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16 posted 12-07-1999 01:25 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Marilyn -

This is truly beautiful, as love is supposed to be.  Hope the tide turns and takes you out on the sea of love.  


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Sally S.
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17 posted 12-07-1999 01:29 AM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

Lovely thoughts, indeed.  ~sigh~  I love love.    
Dark Angel
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18 posted 12-07-1999 04:27 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Beautiful Marilyn

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


 
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