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The Knoll

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Mike
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0 posted 12-01-1999 06:36 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mike

A mile or so outside of town,
At end of River Road,
There sits a shack all broken down,
A yard that's never mowed.

The kids all say a witch lives there,
Is only seen at night,
With wrinkled face and scraggly hair,
In shadow of moon's light.

One summer day I got my pole,
Decided to go fishin',
A mess of perch, I'd eat 'em whole,
Is what I was a wishin'.

Down River Road, I was a funnin',
Til I neared her shack,
Then my feet, they took off runnin',
I never did look back.

I tripped and fell just past her place,
My ankle, I felt pain,
I heard a noise, then saw her face,
The tears my face did stain.

She said, "My dear, you'll be all right,
I'm here to care for you,"
I must admit, a fearful fright,
Of what to me she'd do.

She helped me to her little house,
A hobblin' on one leg,
All the while, scared little mouse,
Was ready to her beg.

She laid me on her quilted bed,
Beside oak rocking chair,
Not another word was said,
As stroked my matted hair.

How long I lay, I do not know,
Because I fell asleep
To sounds of rocking to and fro,
As she made not a peep.

I awoke in dark of night,
When heard my mother's voice,
"Where is my son, is he all right?"
Within I felt rejoice.

I was carried to the chevy,
And laid upon back seat,
Down the road from river levee,
And perch I did not eat.

"You are so kind, we thank you so,"
I heard my mother say,
"But now it's time for us to go,
It's been a trying day."

"I'd like to ask one question though,
If you do not mind,
Then I promise that we'll go,
Again, you've been so kind."

"Have you children of yourself?
You seem so motherly,
I saw no photos on the shelf,
At least none I could see."

She said, "My son has golden hair,
A twinkle in his eye,
With all my heart for him I'll care,
Until the day I die."

To nearby knoll, she turned her head,
A small white cross was there,
"Can't you see him?" is what she said,
"My son with golden hair."



[This message has been edited by Mike (edited 12-01-1999).]
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poetFemmeFatale
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1 posted 12-01-1999 07:24 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Ah Gees! I had no idea what this was going to be about, and wow - what a fabulously crafted twist!! I really really liked this for it's originality, and for your structure of verse that you used! Very enjoyable to read, indeed !!! You should post more often, and I should READ more often!! BRAVO!!!

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Nan
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2 posted 12-01-1999 09:26 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Is there no subject that you can't write about, Mike?? Very nice work...
Denise
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3 posted 12-01-1999 09:44 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Ah, Mike this is so touching, so beautiful. Well done. I was surprised by the ending. Very nice.

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Denise

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4 posted 12-01-1999 10:08 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

Lots of talent here, Mike. I likee this very much.
Elizabeth Santos
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5 posted 12-01-1999 10:26 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Mike
Your talent shines through
This is wonderful, and so engaging and well written
liz
Martie
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6 posted 12-01-1999 10:30 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Very well done Mike.
hoot_owl_rn
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7 posted 12-01-1999 10:34 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Man, what a heartbreaker Mike, well written indeed
Mike
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8 posted 12-02-1999 12:41 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Thank you all muchly. Wanted to try something a little different...
you are all very kind in your comments.
Munda
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9 posted 12-07-1999 06:45 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

And different it is and way too beautiful to be where I found it. Up you go ! : )

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