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Lines of Wire

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Seaangel
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0 posted 12-01-1999 06:17 PM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Seaangel

(This is an oldy but a goody.)

Lines of wire
crossed too many times
see
me I do

walk
the air is lashing
its blue tongue
on my
throat

the leaves slip
swelling waxy green
against my arm

the cars grind
shiny on the
road hot and hungry

the sun colours my face
wettens my skin
heat tendrils hazing
to gusts of
chill wind

the dewy colours
dream into the distance
snap proudly against the
foreground I
listen
© Copyright 1999 Angela King - All Rights Reserved
RSEvans
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1 posted 12-01-1999 06:40 PM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

Good visuals...I especially like the wind's blue tounge
Martie
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2 posted 12-01-1999 06:58 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Reading this was a sensory experience. I like your original use of words, "dewey colors, wettens". Enjoyed the feeling of this.
Seaangel
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3 posted 12-01-1999 08:44 PM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seaangel

thanks, rs, martie. I was trying to give a very sensual experience..much like poems of yours!
Severn
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4 posted 12-02-1999 07:16 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

My friend - I always mean it when I say I like your distinctive style. (See you in the morning!) K
 
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