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What Was I Thinking?

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0 posted 11-30-1999 09:56 PM       View Profile for Poetess099   Email Poetess099   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poetess099

I am the shell of the person I used to be.
Iím numb.
Iím scared.
Iím lost.
I donít have a clue where Iím going, but
I canít forget where Iíve been.
I canít help but be convinced that itís me.
Whatís wrong with me?
What did I do that was so wrong?
Maybe it was the unconditional love
that I offered to you.
I can see where that would make
anyone a horrible person.
Perhaps it was the honesty
that I gave you.
Heaven forbid I tell you how I really feel.
Maybe, just maybe, it was the fact that
I longed to devote my life to you.
Yeah, that could be it.
What a terrible thing for someone to
want to give another their life.
So where else did I go wrong?
Supporting you in everything you pursued?
What was I thinking?!?
Hanging onto your every word and adoring you?
Man, I have some nerve.
No...I know what it was now.....
Meeting you.
Falling for you.
Loving you.
Needing you.
Wanting you.
Letting you get to me.
Wasting your precious time
on such frivolous and petty things.
I really donít know how
I could put you through so much agony.
I mean, I canít even begin to comprehend
what it must have been like to have been so loved.
Good think you never really loved me back, huh?
I would hate to think you were capable
of making such a mistake.
Seeing how perfect you already are.
Wow, this had truly been an eye opening experience.
Thank you so much for letting me see the real you,
and for letting me see what Iím capable of doing.
I guess Iíve made you a victim long enough...
better move onto my next prey.
Just do me one favor before I go, ok?
You keep doing what youíre doing.
Keep being the person that you are now.
Because I know, if you do, in time...
Youíll get exactly what you deserve.
And you know,
thatís all I really want for you.
For you to get every single thing
that you deserve in life.
And I hope Iím there to see
when it finally happens.
Because God knows
Iíve waited forever.

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since 11-16-1999
Posts 31622
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 12-08-1999 08:53 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Mellisa, Very nicely written poem.   Lots of emotions there.  It looks like a classical case of unmutual attraction.   I wrote a poem about that one time it was titled "It Takes Two Baby".  The last line and also my reflection on relationships was "It takes two baby so don't give so freely to those who don't want to receive."  I wrote this shortly after another failed relationship.  Then after some reflections on what I had done wrong I wrote a new poem after my friend Mich challenged me to live in the moment. Here it is and this will be my goal for the rest of my life.  

Life Is a Challenge

Life shouldn't be about hurt and pain.
It should be about acceptance and change.
Living in this moment and always having hope.
Because this is life's challenge and this is so fabulous and true.
Your goal is to meet someone Special that will feel the same Love for you.   James
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2 posted 12-08-1999 10:20 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Melissa, this is well written. Excellent tongue in cheek and a tinge of sarcasm expertly aimed.

 To the world you might be just one person but to one person you might just be the world.

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3 posted 12-08-1999 10:31 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Yes, Melissa, this is excellent! Very well done!  


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since 11-06-1999
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4 posted 12-08-1999 10:38 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Poetess099 -
You just go girl !

 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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since 12-07-1999
Posts 25

5 posted 12-08-1999 10:50 PM       View Profile for paperguardian   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for paperguardian

  Yeah!  This would be tempting to send to a lot of guys I know - LOL!  Perfect sarcasm and I like the way you interspersed questions with those biting statements!
since 09-20-1999
Posts 321
Jasper, Alabama U.S.A.

6 posted 12-08-1999 11:34 PM       View Profile for Lynn   Email Lynn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lynn

  Great poem Melissa. Loved the sarcasm.

 If time cannot heal your pain, you can always cry on my shoulder. ~Jenn~
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