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Thoughts on an Open Door

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Martie
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0 posted 11-30-1999 09:02 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Thoughts on an Open Door

From the open door
the last trace of summer
is the garden hose
snaking between knee heigh dandelions
and sweet peas gone to seed,
air, tinged with the scent
of gasoline and flowers,
leaves, dancing down the street
with a wily breeze
as crows, mark the minutes,
timed to an intimate knowledge
of some unfathomable clock.

While the door is open
you can let in the magic
maps of imagination,
browse, in lines of words,
wonder, is the melodrama
a footsteps crunch
away from becoming
ordinary,
or a taping foot and dogs bark away
from balancing
the straight back of self assurance
and the gentle slope of being content,
with the churning of doubt
and the longing to change.

While the door is open
you can wait for a poem to enter
(as Summer necks openly with Fall)
whose meaning cannot be thoughtlessly
introduced into a conversation
or nonchalantly thrown
in hopes that the retriever can make
its meaning clear,
or you can close this last
vestige of summer door,
and catch the poem waiting effortlessly
on your shoulder,
with the patina of humanity
dulling its brilliance,
winking one mischievous eye.



[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 11-30-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth Santos
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1 posted 11-30-1999 09:09 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Martie, There is so much meat in this, I had to read it over. Nicely written
Elizabeth
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2 posted 11-30-1999 09:17 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie -
'a footsteps crunch
away from becoming
ordinary'

Nothing 'ordinary' about this one.
It's just plain downright awesome.
I love open doors ... thank you for
the view.


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Martie
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Elizabeth and Marge, two poets of such high degree--thankyou for your words.
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The thoughts poetry is made of! Excellent, Martie!

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I like the message here very much, Martie... .. Nice one!
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6 posted 12-01-1999 05:48 PM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seaangel

I love this poem Martie, especially the 'summer necking openly with fall' bit. It's spring, nearly summer,here in the southern hemisphere. As for open doors, it's easy to be too fearful to explore opportunities, one of my own problems, but hey what an inspiring attack!!
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Martie, it is so incredible to me that you can take a simple idea like this and turn it into a poem of this caliber. You are truly amazing. I applaud you loudly.
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what an excellent talent you have for bring words to life
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