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armanca
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0 posted 1999-11-29 09:37 AM


You loved me with all
the finality of a funeral
But i want to be back in that parlor
that in between place
Where i was a decision in your head
a decision of your heart
Where finality has no sense
of direction either way
And I can lie silently between your thoughts
because there i can grow
But when the decision is made
I am put to rest

© Copyright 1999 Carman - All Rights Reserved
suthern
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1 posted 1999-11-29 04:09 PM


Until that decision is made, we can always hope it will be in our favor... well done!

[This message has been edited by suthern (edited 11-29-1999).]

Ohme
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2 posted 1999-11-29 07:42 PM


This I enjoyed. Yes, I think it is sad. but I also feel an element of hope. That's why we hang on!
armanca
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3 posted 1999-11-30 04:53 AM


thank you suthern...I appreciate your comment


Carman

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4 posted 1999-11-30 06:58 AM


Carmen - I like this so much.
It sure creates the image very well.

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armanca
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5 posted 1999-12-02 12:55 PM


Thank you Ohme...and Marge. I really appreciate your thoughts. Thank your for commenting.

Carman

jennyanydots
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6 posted 1999-12-02 05:44 PM


This one is very touching and sad. Not as off the wall as the others. But i enjoyed it.
armanca
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7 posted 1999-12-02 10:23 PM


This came from the heart...about being in limbo with a true love. (or so i thought)
WhtDove
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8 posted 1999-12-12 10:07 PM


What a way to put that! You've explained it well. I hope the decision comes as you'd like it!

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Jesus is the reason for the season


Denise
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9 posted 1999-12-12 10:56 PM


Great little poem..conveys so much!

 Denise



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10 posted 1999-12-12 11:02 PM


This is really deeper than it appears on the surface. Excellent poem.

 To the world you might be just one person but to one person you might just be the world.


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