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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 1999-11-29 09:21 AM


To One He Didn't Know

He wrote a page of poetry
To one he didn't even know
He sailed it down a mountain stream
Etched among the drifted snow

He wrote to one he thought he knew
But never saw and never heard
Poetic verse so heavenly
Laced with song and perfect word

Beauteous the thought and finely scrolled
With words that flowed right from the heart
He wrote to one he thought he knew
Who walked in valleys far apart

The poetry then travelled far
And finally came to rest upon
A weathered stone amid the stream
The very stone she tread upon

She found the leaf and read the verse
Then sat beside a feathered fur
And there she came to know the truth
The words he wrote were meant for her

Elizabeth Santos

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 11-29-1999).]

© Copyright 1999 Elizabeth Santos - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 1999-11-29 10:59 AM


Elizabeth,
Exquisite is hard to place in rhyme
But I must try this single time.
For you twiked my heart in every line
And had me drunk with heady wine.
I cannot tell you how I feel
My head is still a turning wheel.
To thank you would be a palette rare.
For theres not enough color there.
So suffice to say I was enthraled
And am always at your becked call.

Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 1999-11-29 11:10 AM


Sy
An empty palette I've yet to see
According to your poetry
You swing a brush that's surely full
Of words that make my spirit drool
You've said it all just as before
Then why do I still beg for more

Elizabeth

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 1999-11-29 12:18 PM


Elizabeth,
To you I am an open door,
Eat your fill there's plenty more.
I will sing and toast till ghost
And perhaps beyond if let to post.
Please keep the smile upon your face
For most the rest is mostly waste.

Elizabeth Santos
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4 posted 1999-11-29 12:37 PM


Sy,
Rarely in my entire life
Have I not smiled in times of strife
The exception was these weeks just passed
The troubles I knew would not last
But even those with soul of steel
Sometimes need friends to help them heal
And that is why I begged to hear
A friendly voice my soul to cheer
But now it's done the smiles back
I'm running laps around the track
and more than that, You make me laugh
At verses written on my behalf
So thank you for the poetry
Your talent still amazes me
Elizabeth


Sven
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5 posted 1999-11-29 12:37 PM


Elizabeth

Yours is a voice that sings loud and clear
It can make the sad smile and the deaf hear
Surely much has been written about you
And not just by those here.

You put on your heart a smiling face,
But does it mask a haunted place?
One that needs to be sung to
To fill that empty space?

Your heart I can see in your words,
A sweeter song I have never heard.
But who hears your song my dove?
The swan does, for he knows the birds.


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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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6 posted 1999-11-29 01:43 PM


Elizabeth, running laps around the track describes you perfectly, I think...and outlapping the field, may I add? Another wonderful work.
Martie
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7 posted 1999-11-29 01:50 PM


Beautiful Elizabeth! Your words flow so easily, it seems as if an effortless breath has slipped them unsuspecting on the page in perfect harmony.
Elizabeth Santos
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8 posted 1999-11-29 04:15 PM


Sven
No mask is on my face or heart
Nor does the coo the dove has sung
No masqueraded songs impart
Nor from the well of soul has sprung
Thanks for the poem
Elizabeth

Balladeer
No lap around an endless skyway
Could match that scene on a Texas highway!
Elizabeth

Martie,
Beautiful words thrown from the shelf
More lovely than the poem itself
Thank you so much
Elizabeth

lostboy
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9 posted 1999-11-29 04:24 PM


Poetry at it's finest Elizabeth. You write beautifully, I liked this one so much.
Denise
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10 posted 1999-11-29 08:17 PM


Elizabeth, this has to be one of the best poems I have ever read! I love it!

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Denise


Elizabeth Santos
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11 posted 1999-11-29 08:22 PM


lostboy, Thank you so much

Denise, Can't believe you said that, but thank you! Hope to see you soon
Elizabeth

Marge Tindal
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12 posted 1999-11-29 08:28 PM


Elizabeth - I am so reminded of the
Talking Leaves of the Cherokee with this rendering of your words.
I can just see the ~Maiden~ at the water's edge ... reaching out for the leaf ...
written on it, the ~Warrior's~ words.
Purely inspires me ... hmmmmmm?
Thanks, love ... it's beautiful.

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~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Ohme
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13 posted 1999-11-29 09:53 PM


Beautiful, I love it a lot
Elizabeth Santos
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14 posted 1999-11-29 10:00 PM


Marge,
I wanna be the maiden!
Yes, I can just picture her (sigh)
I love those maiden poems. Did you just start writing them now? They're wonderful!
Elizabeth

Ohme,I've been seeing you a lot today, at the end of my verses, Thank You!
Elizabeth

Severn
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15 posted 1999-11-29 10:06 PM


Lovely, Elizabeth.
Quite a poet you are. And all the rejoinders are excellent too.

Elizabeth Santos
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16 posted 1999-11-29 10:14 PM


Severn,
Thank you, dear sir, you are very kind
Elizabeth

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