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Bruising Innocence
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Bruising Innocence |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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of creaming sun small yet brimful in remembered memory tasted dreams hot icecream beneath a tree greenly serene mesmerised by insect allegro nature composed no ugly scars no father-bitten bleed nothing to surrender the bliss of childhood the skill of forgetting bruises, rage and screams that only comes in adult eyes simple sensate joys protect the meek and childly mild defend the vision of innocence as bruises fade to rest in a mind sweltering in the heat of growing youth the summers of loss tragedy heard whispered by complacency’s compositions icecream comforts not at all in youth-lost living where is liberty in abused memory? (no freedom just empty summer heat and remembrance) sweet lost innocence meaning no more than insect song swaying tree sheltering only fear time-caught in a frailed mind lost before it began hidden from any sunlit dreams KM 29.11.99 |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Severn - Hauntingly beautiful. Bruises do heal, my friend. Bless you for this message of courage for all. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
There is no greater cruel offense Than to reap a child's innocence Undue command, by hand or word Undeserving utterance heard To degrade a child is to rape a soul It rapes us all, the spirit's whole This one brought tears Elizabeth |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Very intense, indeed - and well done, Severn |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Very moving...Very beautifully written!! ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Severn, Well done very mature, I like. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Severn, this is pulled from such depth of emotion and feeling. Very well done! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
An incredibly touching piece, Severn. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Marge - that you see it that way is really encouraging. Thank you. Elizabeth - Yes indeed. Children are truly fragile and so many adults exploit that. Nan & Pepper - thanks.  Sy - Glad you like! Martie - pulled from the depths of me I'll agree. Thankyou, my friend. 'deer - glad it got you where I wanted it to - in the heart. |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Powerful, emotional, brilliant...just a few of the adjectives that come to mind. Your talent is amazing. I'll bet you could make stones weep and laugh, Severn!------------------ It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Severn-this is so touching. Children are so vulnerable. The cost some pay is too high. It is a tragedy. They are bruised for life. Well done piece, Severn. ------------------ Denise |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Caroline - you always make me smile, and you think I give YOU an ego boost?! Thankyou my friend. Oops - didn't catch you in time Denise! Thankyou, thankyou. Children are so incredibly vulnerable, yes. They need such nurturing. [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 11-29-1999).] |
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Seaangel Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 167Auckland, New Zealand |
such a powerful piece, severn, i had to bring it back to the top of the list. where does talent come from, and can i get some? |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Thank you for allowing me the experience. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
One word...WOW!!!! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Innocence... often thought upon that word...perhaps even recently bagan to adjust my viewpoints on it. A master stroke here K. Not surprising, but well done nevertheless. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
sea - hugs. Mike - well, you're welcome but thankyou! hoot - hippy happy to you sister of overcoming. Chris - but what is innocence or even surprise to those with jaded, hurt minds? How are you doing? And thanks for the reply. [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 12-02-1999).] |
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mirjam Member
since 1999-11-24
Posts 246Auckland, New Zealand |
one word - ditto! |
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