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Poertree
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0 posted 1999-11-28 12:43 PM


Self pity (an acrostic)

Instinctively I run
Lamed again,
Out from pain,
Veering from her sun.
Ending here in this velvet dark place,
Here where sharpness is blunted by chaos,
Entropically bound; certain madness,
Roped in by my mind, self hate in my face.
She left me for him.
Tattered me
Instantly,
Laid me out; trimmed
Level; lost; unloved.

© Copyright 1999 Poertree - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth
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1 posted 1999-11-28 10:37 PM


Wonderful poem and acrostic. So emotional.
Ohme
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2 posted 1999-11-29 07:55 AM


the sad poems tell about life as it is. Let's hope the moment isn't very long.
Poertree
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3 posted 1999-11-29 08:15 AM


Thanks Roses

Ohme, thank goodness you are wrong - a happier "poet" you could not hope to find - this was just a little test that a "dear friend" !! lol set me to do - but thanks for reading and the concern was appreciated .

P

Elizabeth Santos
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4 posted 1999-11-29 08:29 AM


PoerTree
This poem could not have been just wrought
From fantasy or imagined thought
For I've been in that velvet place
This poem just stares me in the face
The words you choose, beyond belief
My soul's been stolen by poet thief
Elizabeth

Poertree
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5 posted 1999-11-29 05:21 PM


...... ~smile~ Elizabeth .. no honestly

One girl friend
One wife
One 20 yr marriage
No broken hearts

One over active imagination I guess .

P

[This message has been edited by Poertree (edited 11-29-1999).]

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