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This one goes out to "My First"

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ThUnDeRkYsS
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0 posted 11-26-1999 09:10 PM       View Profile for ThUnDeRkYsS   Email ThUnDeRkYsS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for ThUnDeRkYsS

You were the first to make me see
by bringing me down to my knees

The first to ever let me know
by letting feelings freely show

The first to ever steal my heart
by giving each and every part

The first to ever make me "feel"
by showing me "it" can be real

The first to ever make me give
gave all I had, for you I lived

The first to make me feel true Love
and make it feel quite "from above"

The first to break my new found heart
by smashing each and every part

The first to ever make me cry
and wish and hope and pray to die

The first to make me clearly see
how "gone" a "gone" could really be

The first to give, the first to take
did you know a "man" you'd make?

It took me years to realize
it was a "blessing" in disguise

But you're the one who really made
the man that I've become today

You're the one who gave me "heart"
I did'nt have that at the start

I could'nt "feel", untill YOU came
I could'nt cry, until YOUR name

I could'nt give 'till I recieved...
all the things YOU gave to me

I knew not Love, untill YOU "showed"
I knew not pain, untill YOU "told"

I was not whole untill YOU "gave"
untill you gave AND "took away"

Without OUR time I would not be
all the things YOU have made me

For all these things I still Thank You
showed me I only THOUGHT I knew

You were the first and last to see
the "me" before, you "set me free"

For all the things I learned from YOU
I dont regret once Loving you

You left and went to someone new
to someone else who "needed" you

But without this I could not be
the man today, you've made of me.

For all the Love, heartache, and "firsts" that you taught me... Thank You Jackie.

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Life is what you make of it... Not what you let it be
© Copyright 1999 B.J.Howe - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 11-26-1999 09:54 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is so beautiful and full of truth! I enjoyed this very much!

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Denise

devina
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2 posted 11-26-1999 10:01 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

I think your poem is beautiful not only because of talent but because it truly came from your heart! I felt myself being sixteen again, realizing that my first only ended it for my own good. keep the heart!
poetFemmeFatale
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3 posted 11-26-1999 11:45 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Aahh yes, I think we can all look back at a point in our past, and see that someone who first introduced us to love....and pain. This is really written with strong and heartfelt emotion. Very nice job indeed! Thanks for sharing....Chin up - and as they say, experience is the best teacher...

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~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale

ThUnDeRkYsS
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4 posted 11-27-1999 04:09 AM       View Profile for ThUnDeRkYsS   Email ThUnDeRkYsS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ThUnDeRkYsS

dsnyder... Thank You I'm glad you enjoyed it
devina... What a wonderful compliment... Thank You for your kind words
pFF... Thank You too for your kind words My chin is up I am not down about this, but happy. Wrote out of joy, I realize how it was meant to be, AND why I owe my ability to express my feelings to her as well, that is one of the many things I learned from her. She was the best "lesson" of Love and pain in my life.

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Life is what you make of it... Not what you let it be
hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 11-27-1999 09:07 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

So true and oh so beautiful
ThUnDeRkYsS
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6 posted 11-28-1999 07:08 PM       View Profile for ThUnDeRkYsS   Email ThUnDeRkYsS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ThUnDeRkYsS

Thank you for your kind words, as usual, Ruth
Pepper
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You put in words, quite eloquently, that which has been in my heart too ...Thank you Thunderkyss.....

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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!

Severn
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8 posted 11-29-1999 05:10 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Ohhhhhh - gorgeous - I'm sure she loves it.
ThUnDeRkYsS
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9 posted 11-29-1999 06:43 PM       View Profile for ThUnDeRkYsS   Email ThUnDeRkYsS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ThUnDeRkYsS

Pepper... Thank You. I think many feel this way but some just dont know it or realize it yet... And, you're so very welcome as well
Severn... Thank you. I dont know when/if I will give it to her... I've only seen her once in the last 3 years. I hope to though

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Life is what you make of it... Not what you let it be
Marge Tindal
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10 posted 11-29-1999 08:11 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Thunder - Not often you see such wisdom come from a love that didn't 'work'... brilliant, by far ! The very idea of realizing how much we learn from others ... and admitting it ... thoughtful of you to share it.
Thank you.

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ThUnDeRkYsS
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11 posted 11-30-1999 01:20 AM       View Profile for ThUnDeRkYsS   Email ThUnDeRkYsS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ThUnDeRkYsS

Marge... Thank you so much, what a wonderful compliment... but realizing this took all I had, believe me!! LOL I was to the breaking point and back "many" times before I saw it like this, and wondered for many years untill I was ABLE to understand. Partially because I was only only about 18 at this time. But I have learned Once again, Thank You so much
sraet
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12 posted 11-30-1999 01:34 AM       View Profile for sraet   Email sraet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sraet

I skipped over this one before, and now could kick myself for not reading it earlier.

There are so many excellent lines in it, I couldn't choose just one, but here are a few of the ones that touched me most:

"The first to give, the first to take
did you know a "man" you'd make?"

"I could'nt "feel", untill YOU came
I could'nt cry, until YOUR name"

"You were the first and last to see
the "me" before, you "set me free"


Such a paradox and yet I am happy for you, it seems a man of much character has emerged.
Thanks for sharing.


Moon_stone
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13 posted 11-30-1999 03:28 AM       View Profile for Moon_stone   Email Moon_stone   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Moon_stone


Thunder, I felt happy as well as sad.


Dolphins3
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14 posted 11-30-1999 02:45 PM       View Profile for Dolphins3   Email Dolphins3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dolphins3

Thunder I think your poem is super. You have poetically put how I have felt about someone in my past. I think it's just awesome. Thank you for sharing it.
ThUnDeRkYsS
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15 posted 12-03-1999 06:53 PM       View Profile for ThUnDeRkYsS   Email ThUnDeRkYsS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ThUnDeRkYsS

sraet... Thank you so much Your comment means a lot to me, what a wonderful compliment. I thank you for sharing it with me
Moon_stone... You should only feel happy my friend, I do... wrote this as a way of expressing that fact, and giving an example to others of a way to make this type of thing easier to "go through". Although there is no "easy" way, maybe it will help someone to realize that maybe the same has happened to them, just not looking at it like this. Thank you
Dolphins3... Thank you very much, I am glad I was able to express something for you as well, I think many feel this way. I know I do and dont regret anything that has happened for a second
Marge Tindal
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16 posted 12-03-1999 08:31 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Not often I post again, but you're telling me you were only 18 when you LEARNED ALL THIS? My friend, you are remarkable and
she must have been one helluva teacher.
Sometimes going to the rim, without going over it, is the best experience we are blessed to envision.
Thunder - You've done well. Congratulations!

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~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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ThUnDeRkYsS
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17 posted 12-03-1999 09:53 PM       View Profile for ThUnDeRkYsS   Email ThUnDeRkYsS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ThUnDeRkYsS

Marge... I was 18 when "our time" ended {hers and mine}. We were together for about 2 years, and during that time I learned all the things about "feeling" and just about everything else in this poem I mentioned... It was'nt 'till about two years ago {I am 22 now} that I learned WHY her and I were together and what purpose it served to me {looking at it as all things happen for a reason and searching for that reason}... So I would become a more understanding person through it. Not a "reason" planned by her, or me, but THE reason for it. She knew all about Love and feeling and everything else, and was the first to "teach" me HOW to be able to "feel" all these things... which she did, wonderfully. I am eternally greatful for her doing that. That was the biggest "turning point" of my life... So far lol And yes, she was a GREAT teacher.

Thank you for the beautiful compliment, and the congrats. I am truly grateful
Marge Tindal
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18 posted 12-03-1999 10:33 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Then even more credit to your 'report card' ... I'd say you earned a passing
grade from the 'teacher'.
Way to go !
I can sense something great in your future.
Good luck ! Keep writing.

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~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com
 
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