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The box was open
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The box was open |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom 
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The box was open and isolated in the middle of the floor as the lady wrapped her arms around her alone and cold in the corner of the room contents beckoning until she could stand it no more she'd brought it in clearing away cobwebs with a broom but she couldn't find the courage to look inside hours had come and gone and she remained sitting still phone unanswered unable to move tho' she tried tired, hungry and thirsty she knew she had to find the will the box holding parts of her life had been untouched for years thinking back she wondered why she had saved them at all just thinking about opening them brought about fresh tears it couldn't go on, now it was open she'd have to look by nightfall pouring a cognac she got the first box out and put it on her lap she could make out only one word barely legible it was 1971 she was fourteen then with a body that became a living trap He's been a blind date organised by a friend the 'first' one running home with partially torn clothing she waited for her mum no comfort there as she was told she'd brought it on by going shivering under the blankets her only comfort was in sucking her thumb wondering if people could tell would she see looks of disgust and contempt nightmares happened daily after that but she buried it deep inside she'd never be like other girls nor would she be able to wear white she'd lost her most precious gift and had nothing but her pride if only she knew what was yet to come and how much she would need to fight it's over I'm never going back there again and she quickly put the box inside the bin taking out another this one had been protected and the date was clearly shown the music played inside her mind "puppy love" and the image of his violent grin pretty soon he wanted what she wouldn't give and inside her his seed was grown she threw the box across the floor as anger had its way at last she knew it wasn't her smashing the glass upon the wall as all her pent up emotions released their inner hold looking inside the box only a jagged piece of cotton the dress itself remained a blur the secrets bruned inside with all of the things she'd never once told now it was the time to leave the bad things behind she went through all the other boxes dealing with the pain one by one the pressure began to ease and images faded if not disappearing from her mind another cognac and she knew for certain the past was gone and she had finally won ! ------------------ There are two ways of spreading light: to be the candle, or the mirror that reflects it... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
We can't keep the boxes closed forever. Excellent writing, full of painful emotion and victory in the end. HUGS to a very special person. ------------------ Denise |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
A very powerful poem, Rainbow. ------------------ Yesterday is history, tomorrow just a mystery. And if today is good to me how could I ask for more? |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is truly impressive, Rainbow...and that's what we must do....open the boxes, face the fears and then throw them away, never to cause pain again. Wonderfully written. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Rainbow...wow, what a strong piece that speaks volumes. Sometimes I think it would be nice if we could package up all our problems one by one and take them out at a later date we we are more willing/able/ready to deal with them. It just doesn't happen that way though...some of us carry those packages, that extra little baggage with us for a very long time before we are able to throw it out/ put it away for good. What an inspiration this poem is  |
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JTF Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 319France |
WOW ! This one left me speechless with a lump in my throat ... So powereful and vivid ... I could picture you sitting on the floor and going through the boxes ...  ... I'm happy you eventually won ... WARM HUSG |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Well I feel a bit miniscule here behind JTF LOL but had to say RG...awesome, very inspiring piece you've written here. Having opened several boxes myself, I can say the freedom is wonderful! I still have a few in my attic, and I'm bringing them down one by one. Happy smashing, friend Let it go!------------------ Time's fun when you're having flies~~Kermit the Frog |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Denise: Thank you...all hugs really welcome here.. HUGS Ohme: It's hard to know sometimes how something comes across to someone else but thank you for recognising it.. HUGS Bal: It would be too much to hope that they won't cause pain again but maybe a bearable pain.. HUSG Hoot: Call me strange, but these were real boxes, it was the only way I found comfortable for me.. HUGS JTF: I'm struck dumb too... HUSG Caroline: You could never be miniscule, it isn't how big something is, but the depth of feeling...thank you.. HUGS ------------------ There are two ways of spreading light: to be the candle, or the mirror that reflects it... [This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 11-25-1999).] |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
RG, your poem really touched me and gave me goose-pimples all over. It must have taken a lot of courage to open all these boxes. Big hug to you girl. : ) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This poet cannot find the words to express the emotional impact of your words. May you fill many boxes with joy. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Rainbow, WOW!! Emotional, You go girl!! ((((HUGS)))) ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
A very touching and, I agree with DA, emotional piece....! This is wonderfully written Rainbow... Sending Hugs....... ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Munda: Surprisingly enough, it took more courage to write the poem than to open the boxes.. HUGS Martie: One day, I hope that too but so far its eluded me but the wish will never end until I have.. HUGS DA: Thanks Pal, I must admit the sound of shattering glass was great, shame I couldn't have thrown it at him, but men have strength, sadly HUSG Pepper: Thanks sweetheart and thanks for the cards, I may not always say so but they mean a lot to know you care and understand..I'm really lucky to have found a home. HUSG ------------------ There are two ways of spreading light: to be the candle, or the mirror that reflects it... |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Very moving and well written, Rainbow. Give us more of these. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I didn't comment the first time I read this... I had but a few moments... and this deserves much more than a quick response. Now I have more time, and the words still fail me. I can only imagine the courage it took to write this poem, dear friend... and I applaud you for taking control of your life... I'm in awe of you taking a wretched, painful past and putting it in its place... and I wish you a future most victorious. |
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Beri Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 149 |
Rainbow, this poem is so powerful. Like others have said, it would be wonderful to be able to pack all of our painful pasts up in boxes and never look back, but thats just not realistic and you've hit this perfectly. Thanks for sharing something so beautiful with us. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
It's astounding, isn't it? How a single experience can alter the course of our lives forever??? You've expressed yourself quite eloquently here, RG... |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Elizabeth: Thank you but I really hope that such feelings as these find a home in which they can lose the pain and find comfort.... But perhaps you meant the emotion rather than the pain..:-) HUGS Suthern: You, Scott, JTF helped enormously, you let me talk, you listened, extended your hearts to me but most importantly, you offered me love, unconditional love. HUSG Beri: these were boxes, how to explain?...Well, sometimes an experience is so painful, we can't forget so we archive it somewhere, some may think they have disposed of it, but a pain that runs so deep like that of a running brook, will always find a place to stay, so my way was to package it up and take it out at a late date...not sure if that makes sense....but something catastrophic happened to me and I had to find a way to stop the past from destroying my future, so I opened the boxes...it's not over, winning doesn't always mean a trophy but signals a beginning..:-)) HUGS Nan: Eloquent?...No, you are eloquent, I'm just talking from within my mind and hoping that somewhere I can reach out and maybe help another to handle an event that needs time before you can examine the damage and repair it...but, I thank you for thinking it is eloquent, from the bottom of my heart...now shouldn't I have a pic to signal your arrival...a cute rainbow would be nice...:-))) HUSG ------------------ There are two ways of spreading light: to be the candle, or the mirror that reflects it... |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Rainbow, you could sure feel the emotion here! I could picture this in my mind. Hugs you say? well here is a BIG HUG!!!! |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
WhtDove: Thank you sweetheart....HUGS back ------------------ There are two ways of spreading light: to be the candle, or the mirror that reflects it... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
RainbowGirl - An awesome piece of writing. Boxes to be reckoned with ... and you explored them expertly. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow, there is such raw emotion in this! And so happy that she's finally thrown away the past - she is indeed a winner! |
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lostboy Member
since 1999-11-21
Posts 275New Hampshire, USA |
Unreal, I swear I literally felt every emotional progression. A lot of talent shown here girl!! Thanks for sharing |
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cjs9853 Junior Member
since 1999-11-26
Posts 44smyrna, tn usa. |
beautiful:-)) ------------------ |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Marge: Thank you...bless you! HUGS PDV: I'm trying...yeah, I know, I'm very trying *g* HUSG Lostboy: Don't know what to say...so, thank you.. HUGS CJS: Welcome aboard sis.. HUSG ------------------ There are two ways of spreading light: to be the candle, or the mirror that reflects it... |
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