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...Perhaps Tomorrow

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Denise
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0 posted 11-24-1999 08:00 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Denise

A pall of bleakness covers ev'rything
Yet claims no name, no circumstance in time
Descending unannounced on silent wing
Its melancholy strain's devoid of rhyme
And reason for its presence I can't find
Yet still it settles in with plans to stay
And paints my world with hues of somber kind
Its palette holds but darkest shades of gray
The canvas splashed with tones of deepest doom
So grim each stroke no beauty can be found
Pervading all of life with dreary gloom
Within this prison I'm securely bound

I'll ride this tide and hang on through the night
Perhaps tomorrow brings a ray of light.

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Denise



[This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 11-24-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Denise - All Rights Reserved
Andrew Scott
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1 posted 11-24-1999 08:19 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Depression? Just my take... Hope you suffer not, but this was well done just the same.
Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 11-24-1999 08:24 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

It doesn't matter what this poem is about , the phrasing is just beautiful, as usual, Just lovely, Denise
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3 posted 11-24-1999 09:28 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you Andrew and Elizabeth for your kind comments! Yes this is about depression but no, I don't suffer from it...just your run of the mill blues from time to time. But I have known people with clinical depression and I imagine that it feels something like this. Thanks again for your comments!

How are you feeling, Elizabeth? A little stronger each day I hope.

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Denise

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4 posted 11-24-1999 09:31 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

A beautiful sonnet, Denise
I enjoyed

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Yesterday is history, tomorrow just a mystery. And if today is good to me how could I ask for more?


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5 posted 11-24-1999 09:32 PM       View Profile for Julie   Email Julie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Julie

So well illustrated Denise. Very original using this type of imagery...
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6 posted 11-24-1999 09:37 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Even a sad sonnet makes me happy...
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7 posted 11-24-1999 09:42 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Wonderful sonnet Denise. But then I recall two others that were equally as impressive.
No matter the mood, always cream of the crop.
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8 posted 11-24-1999 10:39 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thanks Ohme, Julie, Nan and Mike for your kind comments! As always, it is deeply appreciated!


Yippeeeee!!!! I got a clown face from Nan! Wooohoooo!!!!

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Denise

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Great style, Denise. You are always impressive.
Denise
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10 posted 11-24-1999 10:51 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you Balladeer! So kind you are! Have a great Thanksgiving! I'll be thinking of you all tomorrow when I'm WORKING..grrrr..oh well, at least it's just 'till 2 p.m. and then it's Turkey Time!!!!

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Denise

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What another great sonnet Denise, you need to use that address I gave you
Denise
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12 posted 11-25-1999 12:40 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you so much, Ruth, I definitely will!

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Denise

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Fabulous Denise! Though sadly fabulous
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Denise,
My body has been taken on a trip
A temporary storm on rocky ship
That even breathing has become a task
Laborious a simple question asked
And yet my spirit soars like eagle's wings
And yet my heart with joyous laughter sings
But should I one day find myself in dark
In ugly places cruel with visions stark
Would that you write exquisite poetry
A fine melodic sonnet just for me
To lift me up again on feathered wing
So that my spirit would your sonnet sing
For you have gift of word indeed so rare
And gift of heart you generously share
What pleasure I do take in knowing you
And to all the poets you've been a friend so true
Thank you for your thankgiving wishes
Elizabeth
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15 posted 11-25-1999 01:10 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

I certainly hope you find your ray of light, Denise. This was beautiful, but so sad.


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16 posted 11-25-1999 01:01 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you, WhtDove, Elizabeth and Michael so much for your wonderful comments! And thank you Elizabeth for your beautiful poem! You are special! And Michael thank you for your wishes...I'm just fine! I was just reflecting on some past memories and some of the family members on my Mom's side of the family who battled with clinical depression all their lives. So sad. I imagined that it must feel something like this poem that I wrote. But I don't have personal experience with these feelings myself. Thank God. Must be a horrible state to be in most of the time. Thanks again for your concern.

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Denise



[This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 11-25-1999).]
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Denise! Great imagery of the blues here!
I know when I feel this way, I just hope it soon goes away.

Thanks,

Corinne
Denise
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18 posted 11-25-1999 02:30 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you, Corinne for your kind comments!
Happy Thanksgiving to you and yours!

(check your email!)

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Denise

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19 posted 11-25-1999 02:53 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

Denise, a sad but great sonnet and you even made Nan cry ! ; ) Very well done girl. : )
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I don't think there's anyone who has ever expressed so well about "when you feel depressed" You have a beautiful and simple way to express such feelings.

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mcestrada
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21 posted 11-25-1999 04:48 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

You have painted the emptiness of depression so well Denise--this is a very impressive piece. I'm so glad the description is not of you. Have a happy Thanksgiving!
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22 posted 11-25-1999 05:15 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

I think a tiny little rainbow is needed just to brighten up the picture a little...

Things do seem to lose their shine when sad or unhappy and you expressed the feeling exceptionally well...aren't we a miserable bunch..*g*....oooops

Big HUGS

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There are two ways of spreading light: to be the candle, or the mirror that reflects it...
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Very Impressive Indeed !!

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


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24 posted 11-26-1999 08:55 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you so much, Munda, Mc, Martie, Rainbow Girl and Dark Angel for your kind comments! I am always amazed that people like the things that I write. You are all so sweet!

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Denise

 
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