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Sunsets are Prayers
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Sunsets are Prayers |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Sunsets are Prayers Something about the ocean brings people together. A parking lot filled with cars. The day is closing, people are leaving toting umbrellas, picnic baskets and children covered with sand. One little boy is high footen it across the black top with bare feet. He pauses for a minute on a white parking strip then hurries off again. The sun is closing in on the horizon touching many people on the pier with light and shadow. There are strolling couples, families, groups of teenagers and fishermen with buckets, poles slung over their shoulders. There is the smell of cotton candy the music from the Marry-go-round many laughing voices. Over the rail sand become ocean waves where surfers sit gazing wishes at rising mounds passing under them. A bate shop, a restaurant, then the end of the pier. Fisherman line the railing, bleachers face the horizon, a gallery for gazing. The sun turns the sky gold the clouds pink, then to mauve, lavender and a dusty red. There is a reverent quiet amongst these people of such diversity. The brown skinned boy with a bucket of bait and bare feet sits next to a lady in a silk dress and high heeled shoes who sits next to a woman with a baby blanketed against her breast. All of them watch the sun sink in the silver sea and turn the sky magic then disappear behind the immense and rolling ocean. There is a moments silence, breathing is a sigh. This Sunset is my prayer. Everyone claps and cheers laughs and changes back into their ordinary selves and moves away into their lives. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 11-23-1999).] [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 11-24-1999).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
WOnderful...the imagery was fantastic  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Simply splendid! Great imagery! I enjoyed this sunset very much, Martie! ------------------ Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie - You sure touch a chord of tender memories with this one. Sunset, every evening, is FANTASTIC in Florida ... but Oh, to see the sunset at Mallorey Square in Key West is awesome. Beyond compare. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Beautiful! Thanks for sharing your sunset with us! |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
In total awe.. HUGS ------------------ There are two ways of spreading light: to be the candle, or the mirror that reflects it... |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Oh Wow! Martie, I can just see it, the sand, the people, and ohhh, the sunset! Just imagine it like I was there. Great job in this poem! |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
Martie, this is precious! Yes, the imagery is great. ------------------ Yesterday is history, tomorrow just a mystery. And if today is good to me how could I ask for more? |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
They said it all, Martie. I can only agree. Excellent poem. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I am thinking that this is a thanksgiving poem, thanks for your friendship, thanks for sunsets and thanks for a beauty that can unite all people for one moment in peace, a sunset. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wonderful! I felt like I was there! And for a poem to do that, it must be great..this one is!  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Boy could I ever imagine this! The imagery was just fantastic! I was there! Loved it. |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
martie interesting to see this. the imagery and picture painting are as good as you do now, but your poetry these days has something more as well...call it more depth. the last two lines of this i think you would have not written so overtly nowadays ... the scene you created in words was beautiful though thanks P small typo on "bate" = "bait" .....lol..sorry cant help myself   |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
A special treasure this is... Such beautiful imagery Martie my compliments PoetFriend... Thank you for the enjoyed read... ~coco~ |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
This is gorgeous. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you had it even way back when! and how you've grown! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
This Sunset is my prayer.' Indeed ...~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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