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Sunsets are Prayers

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Martie
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Sunsets are Prayers

Something about the ocean
brings people together.
A parking lot
filled with cars.
The day is closing,
people are leaving
toting umbrellas, picnic baskets
and children covered with sand.

One little boy is high footen it
across the black top with bare feet.
He pauses for a minute
on a white parking strip
then hurries off again.

The sun is closing in
on the horizon
touching many people on the pier
with light and shadow.
There are strolling couples,
families, groups of teenagers
and fishermen with buckets,
poles slung over their shoulders.

There is the smell of cotton candy
the music from the Marry-go-round
many laughing voices.

Over the rail
sand become ocean waves
where surfers sit gazing
wishes at rising mounds
passing under them.

A bate shop,
a restaurant,
then the end of the pier.
Fisherman line the railing,
bleachers face the horizon,
a gallery for gazing.

The sun turns the sky gold
the clouds pink,
then to mauve,
lavender and a dusty red.
There is a reverent quiet
amongst these people
of such diversity.

The brown skinned boy
with a bucket of bait
and bare feet sits next to
a lady in a silk dress and high heeled shoes
who sits next to a woman
with a baby blanketed against her breast.

All of them watch
the sun sink in the silver sea
and turn the sky magic
then disappear behind
the immense and rolling ocean.
There is a moments silence,
breathing is a sigh.

This Sunset is my prayer.

Everyone claps and cheers
laughs and changes
back into their ordinary selves
and moves away into their lives.

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 11-23-1999).]

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 11-24-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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WOnderful...the imagery was fantastic
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Simply splendid! Great imagery! I enjoyed this sunset very much, Martie!

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Martie - You sure touch a chord of tender memories with this one.
Sunset, every evening, is FANTASTIC in Florida ... but

Oh, to see the sunset
at Mallorey Square
in Key West is awesome.
Beyond compare.




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Beautiful! Thanks for sharing your sunset with us!
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In total awe..

HUGS

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Oh Wow! Martie, I can just see it, the sand, the people, and ohhh, the sunset! Just imagine it like I was there. Great job in this poem!
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Martie, this is precious!
Yes, the imagery is great.

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They said it all, Martie. I can only agree. Excellent poem.
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I am thinking that this is a thanksgiving poem, thanks for your friendship, thanks for sunsets and thanks for a beauty that can unite all people for one moment in peace, a sunset.
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Wonderful! I felt like I was there! And for a poem to do that, it must be great..this one is!
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Boy could I ever imagine this! The imagery was just fantastic! I was there! Loved it.
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martie

interesting to see this.  the imagery and picture painting are as good as you do now, but your poetry these days has something more as well...call it more depth.  the last two lines of this i think you would have not written so overtly nowadays ...

the scene you created in words was beautiful though

thanks

P

small typo on "bate" = "bait" .....lol..sorry cant help myself    
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A special treasure this is...
Such beautiful imagery Martie my compliments PoetFriend...
Thank you for the enjoyed read...
~coco~
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This is gorgeous.
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you had it even way back when! and how you've grown!
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This Sunset is my prayer.'

Indeed ...~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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Enjoyed

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