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Burning Love

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Lynn Burdette
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0 posted 11-23-1999 11:36 AM       View Profile for Lynn Burdette   Email Lynn Burdette   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lynn Burdette

Burning Love
By:Lynn Burdette
Coals burning in a fire,reminds me of love I once desired.
Burning,burning I will not forget, the love
I experienced I came to regret.
My heart did hurt at the end of our road
An ache I never wanted sowed.
The pain I felt in my chest, was very strong I must confess.
The words we said, the things we'd done, I only wish had never begun.
So the flames in my soul will one day go out
I know it for sure without a doubt.
Because those flames will then be replaced,
by somebody's touch, love and embrace.
For now I will wait by the fire, with the burning of the love I once desired.


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[This message has been edited by Lynn Burdette (edited 11-24-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Lynn Boivin - All Rights Reserved
Lynn Burdette
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1 posted 11-23-1999 12:20 PM       View Profile for Lynn Burdette   Email Lynn Burdette   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lynn Burdette

Please let me know what you think of this poem. I am new to writing poems and want to know if i stink at it or not.
Thanks a bunch.
Lynn
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2 posted 11-23-1999 05:11 PM       View Profile for Lynn   Email Lynn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lynn


Lynn...You definitely DO NOT stink. I liked this a lot. And welcome to passions.

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If time cannot heal your pain, you can always cry on my shoulder. ~Jenn~
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3 posted 11-24-1999 12:09 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is lovely, Lynn. (just a couple minor grammatical changes) Very lovely poem!

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Denise

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4 posted 11-24-1999 12:56 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Hi, Lynn, I decided to re-read it before I went to sleep!

I think that 'sowed' should be 'sown' - not sure I could be wrong.

'the things we done' I guess that could either be 'the things we did' or 'things we'd done'.

And spelling 'dought' should be 'doubt'

Good night! Again, great poem!

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Denise

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