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Lynn Burdette Junior Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 25Greensboro, Georgia ( I'm a Georgia peach!) |
Burning Love By:Lynn Burdette Coals burning in a fire,reminds me of love I once desired. Burning,burning I will not forget, the love I experienced I came to regret. My heart did hurt at the end of our road An ache I never wanted sowed. The pain I felt in my chest, was very strong I must confess. The words we said, the things we'd done, I only wish had never begun. So the flames in my soul will one day go out I know it for sure without a doubt. Because those flames will then be replaced, by somebody's touch, love and embrace. For now I will wait by the fire, with the burning of the love I once desired. ------------------ [This message has been edited by Lynn Burdette (edited 11-24-1999).] |
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Lynn Burdette Junior Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 25Greensboro, Georgia ( I'm a Georgia peach!) |
Please let me know what you think of this poem. I am new to writing poems and want to know if i stink at it or not. Thanks a bunch. |
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Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
Lynn...You definitely DO NOT stink. I liked this a lot. And welcome to passions. ------------------ If time cannot heal your pain, you can always cry on my shoulder. ~Jenn~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is lovely, Lynn. (just a couple minor grammatical changes) Very lovely poem! ------------------ Denise |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Hi, Lynn, I decided to re-read it before I went to sleep! I think that 'sowed' should be 'sown' - not sure I could be wrong. 'the things we done' I guess that could either be 'the things we did' or 'things we'd done'. And spelling 'dought' should be 'doubt' Good night! Again, great poem! ------------------ Denise |
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