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Iloveit
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since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121
NM

0 posted 1999-11-23 10:17 AM


we started on fire
almost instantly
heat and pleasure
one in the same but
is it our fate to die the same
no more than a glowing ember
in a child's hand
at the end of the 4th
circling round and round
naught after all the glory
but a dying spark
in the night?

or shall we, hand in hand
pass on by the celebration
of independence, and find
in each other
sparklers someone else laid aside,
maybe not free for the taking
but certainly offered
at a price far lower
than the worth of the joy
contained within?

shall we search for the joy
so needed, so deserved
and laugh and dance
and light fires long into the night
burning two at a time
until its almost Christmas
and the spark still
burns brightly
as the new year turns?


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©1999 Iloveit



[This message has been edited by Iloveit (edited 11-23-1999).]

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hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
1 posted 1999-11-23 10:42 AM


you certainly don't fizzle with this work
JTF
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since 1999-08-09
Posts 319
France
2 posted 1999-11-23 10:50 AM


I'll pray for your spark to survive Y2K ...

It reminded me "Dancing in the dark" from The Boss ...

HUSG

Pepper
Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079
Southern Florida
3 posted 1999-11-23 10:58 AM


I vote for "flame"...
Really enjoyed this piece Iloveit.....

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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!


Iloveit
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since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121
NM
4 posted 1999-11-23 11:14 AM


thanks hoot
me too JTF
and thanks pepper, "flame's" got my vote too

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
5 posted 1999-11-23 11:43 AM


I say keep the fire's burning!
RainbowGirl
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since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023
United Kingdom
6 posted 1999-11-23 12:35 PM


Iloveit: You know where my vote is..*g*

HUSG

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


Iloveit
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since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121
NM
7 posted 1999-11-23 06:32 PM


*g* yep, so the flame's got the majority, should I let him in on the vote *big grins*

thanks RG

Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
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Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA
8 posted 1999-11-23 10:56 PM


keep it burning. I'll bring marshmellows.


Beautiful, btw.

Ohme
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 816
Texas
9 posted 1999-11-24 01:05 AM


Stoke it!

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Yesterday is history, tomorrow just a mystery. And if today is good to me how could I ask for more?

suthern
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723
Louisiana
10 posted 1999-11-24 07:29 AM


Great poem, Lovey... keep 'em sizzlin'! *G*
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