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She Looked At You

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Sunshine
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0 posted 11-22-1999 05:19 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

She Looked At You

She stood quite quiet, she emoted cool
just one look at her, yes, nobody’s fool;
her temper soothing, her demeanor so calm
she was restful to see, no uttered qualm…

But when she looked at you…

First, you’re taken in by her eyes of green
fine lined wrinkles of smiles often seen
and straight-away she gazes at you so steadily
right back into your eyes, as your soul she sees…

Next, her body is perfect, for a woman her age,
you can see she’s been hugged, perhaps walked a stage;
no airs nor swagger, nor feminine wiles
she’s solid, not stolid, she’ll go many more miles.

But when she looked at you…

There was something about her, it was in the air
not a forbidden scent no, something beyond compare,
yes, something about her, yes, you may think…
ah, it was when she caught your soul, with her quiet wink.

She stood there poised, but just on the brink
she watched your face, and knows what you think;
quiet contemplation, with face quite serene
but the wink brought forth to mind, a laughing queen.

So when she looked at you…

She made you quite pleased to be in the same room
you caught yourself without your ever present gloom,
she lit up your life, more than you liked to think,
from all that she gave you, one quick little wink.

22 November, 1999
©KRJ

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Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow



[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 11-23-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Karilea Rilling - All Rights Reserved
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Lovely Sunshine, just lovely.
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very nice poem. I really like it.
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I echo Severn Sunshine......
It is simply lovely!

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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!



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Sunshine -
This is so pretty.
It's just so pretty.
Did I mention that it's so very pretty?
I think I like it very much.
Very, very much.

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Severn, Pepper, I think this fits us well...

DMB, thank you for coming in, and welcome to Passions...

Marge, you're cracking me up!
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Sever....wonderfully written
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Thanks, Hoot.
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Just a wink...Wars have started over less. Beautifully written.

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Thank you, RE. You are quite right. {~,^}
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really really like this sunshine, beautiful read
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Thank you, ILI...it likes me, too!
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This is great, Sunshine... Well done!
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Suthern, as I face south, I curtsy. Thank you.
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[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 11-23-1999).]
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Great poem. Liked this one, Sunshine!
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When she looked at me. . .she saw you with this poem

excellent

Sven

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comme toujours
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Sunshine this was really neat! Very well done! Some just have that gift, that you can feel when you walk into a room.
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This is beautiful, Sunshine! Very well written!

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Denise

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Joy, Sven, Whtdove, Denise...I am overwhelmed at the responses this has received, as well as Marge's personal e-mail to me.

Thank you ALL so very much. Perhaps this one is a keeper.

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Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

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A definite keeper Sunshine!! Eye contact can be sooo much more than a simple exchange.
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Sunshine - I read this again, as it is one of my favorites now that my daughter has decreed that she sees ME in it. What a wonderful compliment to this mom.
I hope you will be pleased to know that she has printed it out to share with the family.
I mean ... this is really a wonderful descriptive writing. Thank you sooooo much for sharing.

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LostBoy, Marge,

these are the best compliments. My sun is shining. Thank you.
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Sunshine it's been awhile since I've been around to read your poetry!! This is one of my favorites from you!! I could picture this, and it made me smile!! Very cool!!

Thanks...

Bridgette

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"It may take a boy to turn a girl's head, but it takes a man to turn a girl's heart."
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pleasantly surprised! Beautiful and yes, surely a keeper. Nice work here, Sunshine.
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