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Three Little Critters (Challenge tween Devine and I)

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WhtDove
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0 posted 11-22-1999 01:52 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

The challenge was to use the first two sentances that I have here.

The last thing I expected
Was the first thing that I saw
When I looked from my window
And I stood there just in awe

I saw three little babies
There was no mother ‘round
They jumped and climbed and tumbled
Really playful on the ground.

Three furry little critters
With their tiny painted masks
Their three ringed little tails
As they scrounged around for snacks

Such curious lil’ critters
But so lonely on their own
With their momma not around
Would they make it to be grown?

Two of them, they scampered up
To the top of the tree’s limbs
But one of them just sat there
Wasn’t running on a whim

So slowly I approached him
While extending out my hand
I thought I might get bitten
But it went how I had planned

Think he was as scared as me
He didn’t move a muscle
I put my hand out towards him
And gave a nervous chuckle

He sat there still and quiet
As my hand pet his rough fur
And as I gently stroked him
I wondered, where was his mother?

I watched these little babies
As they stayed around and played
Long as you stood back and watched
The lil’ critters weren’t afraid


For many days I watched them
Then one day they disappeared
Don't know if they just ran off
Or were roadkill, that I feared

Three tiny little raccoons
And they filled my days with joy
Wonder where it is they went
With no mother to convoy


[This message has been edited by WhtDove (edited 11-22-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 WhtDove - All Rights Reserved
DreamEvil
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1 posted 11-22-1999 06:44 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

'Tis a truly pleasant scene your well-spun verse has wrought.

Very good Becca.

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Spring Heeled Jim
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2 posted 11-22-1999 06:48 AM       View Profile for Spring Heeled Jim   Email Spring Heeled Jim   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Spring Heeled Jim

Made me smile

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On tops all I need
I got rythm when I bleed
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3 posted 11-22-1999 07:05 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

You did it! I'm impressed. Geez, now I have to get cracking on mine! I liked your story here - cute poem.
WhtDove
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4 posted 11-22-1999 08:16 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Well thank you Scott for your reply, I appreciate that!

SHJim, glad it brought a smile to you! And welcome to Passions!!!

PdV thanks! You know you still have time, I just happened to finish early that's all!
The STORY IS TRUE BTW!
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5 posted 11-22-1999 08:50 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Nice job Dove....
Marilyn
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6 posted 11-22-1999 10:57 AM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Wonderful little story Dove. Enjoyed it, made me smile.
hoot_owl_rn
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7 posted 11-22-1999 10:58 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Cute one Whtdove
WhtDove
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8 posted 11-22-1999 02:10 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Thank you dear Toe!

Thank you Marilyn, glad you enjoyed it!

Thank you Hoot!
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9 posted 11-22-1999 02:16 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

But if those little critters
Wandered too far way down south
They're on some redneck's stove tonight
Filling a hungry mouth!

Sorry, Dovie... couldn't resist! *G* I enjoyed this very much! *S*
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Delightful WhtDove....liked this much

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11 posted 11-22-1999 07:24 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

So cute! I loved it!

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Denise

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12 posted 11-22-1999 07:42 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Hey, Dove, I think I saw them down at that Chinese restaurant as Blue Plate specials, you know, the one that put out that new cookbook "50 ways to wok your dog".

KIdding, Dove! Just kidding! I'm sure they're all right.

Delightful poem, little dove.
WhtDove
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13 posted 11-22-1999 08:14 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

LOL Suthern! That's quite alright! Hmmn, wonder how that would taste. LOL

Pepper thanks so much!

Thank you Denise glad you enjoyed it.

BALLADEER!!! LOL Blue Plate special...
very funny. Thanks much buddy!!!!
Echo Rhayne
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14 posted 11-23-1999 11:10 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

awwwwwwe I think the 'coons made it to Cali and ended up in my backyard LoL. I like this very much, considering I love 'coons and all! Tis cute indeed!


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WhtDove
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15 posted 11-23-1999 11:22 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Thanks Echo! I prefer to think they left my yard to go to yours. Instead of Suthern and Balladeer's thoughts! LOL...
Dark Angel
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16 posted 11-23-1999 05:47 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Hey Angel, such a lovely poem, just love those little critters

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Samuel Coleridge


WhtDove
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17 posted 11-23-1999 07:38 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Thanks DA!
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18 posted 11-23-1999 09:00 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

WhiteDove - What a delightful poem.
I'm glad PoetDeVine challenged you.
This one is a keeper for sure.


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WhtDove
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19 posted 11-23-1999 11:34 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Thank you Marge. I challenged her with the first line, then she challenged me with the second, and we just combined the two together! LOL
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