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Hamster

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Balladeer
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0 posted 11-21-1999 07:23 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

I had a hamster in a cage
That used to give me smiles.
It ran forever in one place
For what would seem like miles.

That creature ran that small treadmill
From dawn to setting sun.
I used to wonder to myself...
What makes that hamster run?

It wasn't going anywhere.
It only ran in place.
Its energy was wasted as
It kept a frenzied pace.

Yet, on and on, from dusk till dawn
He ran his endless quest.
Well, it was just the silly way
Of hamsters, I had guessed.

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My lover dumped me late last week,
Just told me with a sigh
That she had found another and
She had to say goodbye.

She said I was a real sport.
She wants me as a friend
But love that I had counted on
Had reached a sudden end.

I tried to keep stiff upper lip.
I calmly said goodbye.
Then, as she walked out my life,
I laid down for a cry.

How many times had I been through
This same scenario?
To meet someone and fall in love
And then to watch them go?

My life, it seemed, was nothing more
Than one long, sad parade
Of lovers coming....lovers going....
No one ever stayed.

I laid down on the bed. My eyes
Were dripping misery....
The hamster had stopped running and
Was staring down at me.

He stared at me - I stared at him.
'Twas as if he read my mind
And, through some quirk of nature, seemed
Our thoughts were intertwined.

I stared at him - he stared at me.
The minutes slowly passed
Till, finally, I smiled and knew
I understood at last.

By now the dawn was breaking. I
Heard birds sing, cheerily.
I took my hamster friend outside....
And then I set him free.
© Copyright 1999 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 11-21-1999 07:39 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Ahhhhhhhh this is so precious! How sweet!

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Denise

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2 posted 11-21-1999 07:46 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Wisdom wisdom wisdom...
Bravo Balladeer, bravo.
Julie
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3 posted 11-21-1999 07:47 PM       View Profile for Julie   Email Julie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Julie

Bravo! You are truly amazing Balladeer!
Dusk Treader
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4 posted 11-21-1999 08:13 PM       View Profile for Dusk Treader   Email Dusk Treader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dusk Treader

I was surprised by how it turned out after being titled "Hamster." Great piece Balladeer, thoroughly enjoyed


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"'Cause there's a hunger, a longing to escape, from the life I live when I'm awake" - Creed - "Higher"


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hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 11-21-1999 08:18 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Ah, I do like Balladeer. Can certainly relate to that poor hampster caught up in this rat race we call life
RobertB
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6 posted 11-21-1999 08:47 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

hey Balladeer....for a few lines I wondered where in the world this was going when it jumped from Hamster to lost love! Thanks for tying it all together...though a sad note: last week I ran over some hamster that was turned loose. I think it committed suicide.

j/k!!

RB

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if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.
Ohme
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7 posted 11-21-1999 09:44 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

I love it, Balladeer.

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Yesterday is history, tomorrow just a mystery. And if today is good to me how could I ask for more?
John Yaws
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8 posted 11-21-1999 10:20 PM       View Profile for John Yaws   Email John Yaws   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit John Yaws's Home Page   View IP for John Yaws

My Friend, I still must bow to the master of rhyme. I love your style...of course mine is simialar, but not nearly as refined. another GREAT poem.
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9 posted 11-21-1999 10:36 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

This was unique. Sad Balladeer.
Very well written

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Martie
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10 posted 11-21-1999 10:50 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

This was such a great poem Balladeer. I read it and then well, wow! was how I felt. Very sensitively written.
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11 posted 11-21-1999 10:55 PM       View Profile for Twilight_Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Twilight_Angel

How meaningful! The way you taught this lesson was so touching and sweet. Perfect!
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12 posted 11-22-1999 09:48 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Ah, I see the Dr. Doo-littling...great piece!
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13 posted 11-22-1999 09:52 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Lessee?...Okay, put two and two together...Your girlfriend thought of you as a rodent?..So? she set you free, and you set the hamster free?....Yea, I got it....

Very well done Balladeer....
BTW...you didn't let the hamster go in some little old ladies house that said she didn't need a pest control contract didja?
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14 posted 11-22-1999 10:10 AM       View Profile for broker6   Email broker6   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for broker6

My former mother-in-law used to scrinch up her face and say, You know, he's kinda peculiar. I thought I was going to have to say that about you. But you pulled this off quite nicely. I like poems that start here and end over there . . . that take you on a little journey.

broker6
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15 posted 11-22-1999 10:12 AM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

gonna ditto whtdove on this one, very nice my friend, but then of course shortly after dittoing whtdove, I will be ROFG@letting the hamster go in an old ladies house....

great work balladeer, loved this
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16 posted 11-22-1999 10:52 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

As soon as I can quit giggling at the thought of the suicidal hamster or that ole lady reconsidering her need for a rodent contract, I'll be able to tell Balladeer what a great poem this is! LOL.

Ahhh, 'Deer... you did set yourself up to be called a dirty rat! *G* Well done!!! (as I giggle again *G*)

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Marilyn
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17 posted 11-22-1999 10:54 AM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

What can I say Sir? Another master piece!
Balladeer
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18 posted 11-22-1999 10:59 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Wow! What a range of responses! Thank you all for the kind words.

Robert, ya ran over my hamster?! Oh, no! Well, just goes to show you sometimes we're better off in a controlled environment.

Toe, I should get paid for setting myself up so easily for your wit. ROTFLMAO!! Yep, that's it...two rodents set free. Thanks for not disappointing me!

Broker6...well, I'm glad I dodged 'peculiar' this time. But there's always next time....

Again, thanks to all of you.
Seymour Tabin
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19 posted 11-22-1999 12:37 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Balladeer,
Two poems in one,
So that's what made sammy run?
Great poem.
tori
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20 posted 11-22-1999 02:05 PM       View Profile for tori   Email tori   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tori's Home Page   View IP for tori

Balladeer you crack me up... loved it..I did the same thing with geribles.after they ate the second habbit trail .. now I think I've got a cross breed of geri-moles eating my garden.. lol
doreen peri
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21 posted 11-22-1999 11:47 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

Ok, it's my turn.

Well... I'm sorta embarrassed to say that I don't get it.

Seriously. I don't get this poem. I mean, I LIKE the story and everything.. I can SEE that hamster going around and around and frankly, I thought the poem was going to be about what hootowl said... about being "caught up in the race we call life".

Ummm.. well, then you changed it to the loving and losing love thing.. and that was cool.... and I expected it to be tied together somehow and everybody here seems to get it but me!?!

Could you help me out here, Michael, m'friend? How does it tie together? What do you mean to imply when you go let the hamster free and how does that relate to your loves that didn't work out?

Could it be that Toerag was on the money here? Like... what you're trying to say is... no WONDER they let you free (those lovers of yours), because you were just going around and around in circles and not getting anywhere and they didn't want to be stuck with some hamster on a treadmill? or....

Were you trying to say that love hurts and nobody wants to be in a cage?

or...

Were you trying to say that love can make you spin around in circles over and over but when it's all over, you really don't want to be loved and don't want the commitment, but you only want your freedom.... if you were a hamster?.... or

Were you trying to say that no matter how comfortable it seems for that hamster in that cage with it's wheel spinning around on its axis, you can't quite put your finger on it, but something isn't right and you've got to get out and when you are let out, you are upset about it, but you get back on the treadmill and do it all over again trying to fill that void?

LOL... as you can see... I got a LOT out of this poem!!! It really made me think. Thanks much, Michael. I hope you didn't mind my questions instead of telling you how much I liked the poem... which I obviously did.

luv ya babe, doreen
RainbowGirl
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22 posted 11-23-1999 12:26 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Well, at gone 5am, I think it's about making the most and letting go but then I never did understand my own thinking..LOL

So, I'll settle for Bal being worried about the poor little hammy only having two places to go..*g*

HUSG

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.
Cinderella
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23 posted 11-23-1999 11:48 PM       View Profile for Cinderella   Email Cinderella   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cinderella

I know how hamsters multiply...and so do your marvelous poems!
Sally S.
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24 posted 11-24-1999 12:42 AM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

Doreen,
Well, only Mike can tell you exactly what he meant but, here's my take on it....

You can not hold someone (or something) that yearns to be free. Lovers coming and going....a hamster that longed for freedom.
In the end, he felt content because he realized it wasn't him at all..it was nature.

ok....now, tell her I'm all wrong sweetie. LOL
 
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