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A poets poem

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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 11-21-1999 06:31 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Seymour Tabin

A poets poem

Each poet writes between the lines.
On which they hope that someone dines.
They launch it into tender flight,
With phantom string that holds it tight.

Among the flowers of their poem,
Held by fears that will not comb.
Reveal their bleeding of the night,
To someone reading in the light.

They drain themselves upon this rack,
Of weighted sin upon their back.
And send their pleas of self deny
Into the air on a butterfly.

They hold their breath that one will read,
The vail of message that they seed.
Among the lovely of their tea.
And hear dear God, I read their plea.

So if you read a poets poem,
Comb full the words that they have sown.


[This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (edited 11-22-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 11-21-1999 06:34 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

I would make only one small change, but regardless, this is absolutely beautiful, and too true.
RobertB
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2 posted 11-21-1999 06:36 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

way to go seymore!!!! That is exactly how I write...between the lines on so many poems! You described it so neatly!!! play it again seymore!!

Robert

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Julie
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3 posted 11-21-1999 06:36 PM       View Profile for Julie   Email Julie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Julie

I have combed the words you have sown...beautiful words as fresh as a rose in morning dew...Sy...you never cease to amaze me with your talent.
Marge Tindal
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4 posted 11-21-1999 07:04 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Seymour - Such thoughtful phrases to be savoured. Great piece of work.

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Elizabeth Santos
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5 posted 11-21-1999 07:16 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Oh! Poet's poet of poetry
So sweet this poet's epopee
Oh! Reader hark the poet's plea
And help me 'tween the lines to see
For I, too blind at times to see
And swept by sensuality
And carried off by verse and rhyme
I fail to read between the line
Poor poet's effort come to naught
He wrote between the lines and thought
Unwritten words engraved on stone
Unwritten words to me unknown
Elizabeth
Denise
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6 posted 11-21-1999 07:16 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I think you have described us all very well in this one, Seymour! Simply beautiful!

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Denise

Severn
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7 posted 11-21-1999 10:05 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

A true feeling - one all we poets should aspire to. I like the image of combing - but through my combing, friend, I found a small 'has' that could perhaps be a 'have'.


[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 11-22-1999).]
Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 11-22-1999 12:16 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Sunshine,
I have done some revission but I'm glad you likes. Thank you *L*
Julie,
Thank you so much loved you comment.
Marge,
Thank you for the great. *L*
Elizabeth,
Your poem has classic line
For all to read and dine.
I am in awe I say once more
Your mind and all its store.
Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 11-22-1999 12:22 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Denice,
Once again I thank you,
Severn,
Thank you, thank you, I have made the correction. *L*
Ohme
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10 posted 11-22-1999 12:32 AM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

Seymour, have you been watching me while I write my poetry? From your poem it seems you have. You described me perfectly.
Love the poem!

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Yesterday is history, tomorrow just a mystery. And if today is good to me how could I ask for more?
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11 posted 11-22-1999 11:08 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Each hidden line
Each silent word
Sits there longing
To be heard
The meaning though
Not always clear
If carefully read
Shall appear
As words not needed
In the rhyme
Reveal themselves
In given time

Nice read Seymore....not that I ever expect anything different when I open one of your poems

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Alis volat propriis
(She flies with her own wings)

Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 11-22-1999 12:23 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Hoot,
Exactly, very astute.
WhtDove
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13 posted 11-22-1999 12:31 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

You describe so well the poet Seymour!
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14 posted 11-22-1999 01:24 PM       View Profile for FreeByrd   Email FreeByrd   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit FreeByrd's Home Page   View IP for FreeByrd

Hit the nail right one the head. Once again.....

Nicely done.

-RS

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tori
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15 posted 11-22-1999 01:58 PM       View Profile for tori   Email tori   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tori's Home Page   View IP for tori

Can't add much more to whats been said butI loved it Seymour!!
Seymour Tabin
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16 posted 11-22-1999 06:46 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

WhtDove,
Thank you so much a poet.
Free Byrd,
As long as I didn't hit my thumb, thank you.
Tori,
Love it is enough.
Balladeer
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17 posted 11-22-1999 07:01 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

GEEZ! I spent hours standing in this line to offer my congrats. I need to find a way to get between the lines! Well done, Sy.
Andrew Scott
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18 posted 11-22-1999 07:58 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

What was said
But never read
Is the line between
the written word
Where
Between the rhymes
A whisper chimes
Below the shout
That can't be heard


Well done, Sir Tabin

Severn
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19 posted 11-22-1999 08:29 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Hey there Sy - I see I have some correcting to do on my own reply! My 'smal' shall now become a 'small'!!! LOL.
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20 posted 06-02-2008 03:09 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

Yes, I read and think of you.  You remain a poet's poet in my eyes.

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