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Moonshine
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0 posted 11-18-1999 09:51 AM       View Profile for Moonshine   Email Moonshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Moonshine's Home Page   View IP for Moonshine

This is something I just wrote. It's not a very good piece but I thought that I would post it anyway.

BROKEN:

You shoved yourself inside of me
Forcing yourself all the way in
I tried to fight but you were too strong
The pain was unbearable - burning, ripping my skin
You pounded yourself into me
Slamming my body into the ground
I tried to fight you and I tried to scream
But all that came out was a small whimpering sound
You grunted and moaned as you took your pleasure from me
Tasting tears that stung as they fell down my cheeks
My body hurt all over from what you had done
I prayed that death would set me free
You pounded yourself harder into me
Slamming my broken body into the earth
Then inside of me you emptied your bitter seed
Nothing my life now was worth
With cold eyes you stared at me
As I pulled my torn pants back on and wiped away dirt and blood
You told me not to tell anyone
Inside my soul was dead.
© Copyright 1999 Jen - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
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1 posted 11-18-1999 10:38 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

This is so sad and tragic

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Alis volat propriis
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RSEvans
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2 posted 11-18-1999 11:24 AM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

I can only pray this is not from experience and if it is..I am truly sorry. This was a very disturbing read but also very well written.

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Once I was brilliant, now I no longer shine, but the twinkle in my eye speaks of another time.
Moonshine
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3 posted 11-19-1999 07:14 AM       View Profile for Moonshine   Email Moonshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonshine's Home Page   View IP for Moonshine

Dear Hoot_owl_rn,

I'm sorry, I should have probably posted this piece in dark passions. I wrote it last night and just posted it in here, didn't even think of posting it in there.
Moonshine
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4 posted 11-19-1999 07:16 AM       View Profile for Moonshine   Email Moonshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonshine's Home Page   View IP for Moonshine

Dear RSEvans,

Thanx for your comment and encouragement.
hoot_owl_rn
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Moonshine...there isn't anything in it that prevents it from being posted here. Having been there, that type of thing hits hard with me. I only hope you don't speak from experience, but with the strength of your words, my mind tells me otherwise. No one should have to go through this. Know my thoughts are with you.
Hugs
Ruth

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Alis volat propriis
(She flies with her own wings)

Marilyn
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6 posted 11-19-1999 11:37 AM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

I have never experienced this tragidy (ThankGod!!). I do however feel all of the pain and anger from this piece. I am sorry if this is a true life experience. I wish I knew how to help.
Julie
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7 posted 11-19-1999 11:55 AM       View Profile for Julie   Email Julie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Julie

This piece was indeed tragic and if from experience I hope you didn't let him walk away free of consequences.

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Julie
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Pepper
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This is tragic and heartbreaking Moonshine. I have no words of wisdom to comfort you with my dear....so I can only offer hugs...
I wish you peace of heart and closure to this horror.....

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Moonshine
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9 posted 11-20-1999 02:25 AM       View Profile for Moonshine   Email Moonshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonshine's Home Page   View IP for Moonshine

Thankyou for your kind words Ruth,
Poetry is how I get my feelings out. I hope this poem did not upset you.
Moonshine
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10 posted 11-20-1999 02:27 AM       View Profile for Moonshine   Email Moonshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonshine's Home Page   View IP for Moonshine

Thanx Marilyn,
For your kind words and encouragement.
Moonshine
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11 posted 11-20-1999 02:29 AM       View Profile for Moonshine   Email Moonshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonshine's Home Page   View IP for Moonshine

Thanx for your comment Julie,
I was young at the time, I walked away with the consequences cause that's all I could do.
Moonshine
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12 posted 11-20-1999 02:31 AM       View Profile for Moonshine   Email Moonshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonshine's Home Page   View IP for Moonshine

Dear Pepper,

Thanx for your lovely comment and encouragement and also for your kind words.
Dark Angel
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13 posted 11-20-1999 04:48 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Moonshine,I too feel all the pain and anger from this poem,Please know that I am here for you anytime ok HoneyBee. (((((HUGS)))))

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Moonshine
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14 posted 11-20-1999 04:56 AM       View Profile for Moonshine   Email Moonshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonshine's Home Page   View IP for Moonshine

Thanx DA,

You're such a sweet person, that really means a lot to me.
 
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