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Spirit's Song

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Severn
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0 posted 11-17-1999 08:24 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn

Passion intense
ravages my every step
I stare upon a sunset
and feel live colors
flow through my veins
as blood
I walk barefoot among
grains of sand
and exhale them
as my breath

I know no quiet
this world is loud
even in silence
still

Where then lies my peace?

Who can calm
the raging storms
of my mind
every thought alive
and sense too strong
for rest

I feel dangerous
alone
unsafe yet free
this tasting of the earth's life
leads to risk
and calls so mighty

but

I am small
lost amid those
with deadened eyes
misunderstood
and needing constant thrill

Who then can help me sleep

yet
touch the color of
the sunset there with me
and vision the reins of control
as thin slices of
a floating cloud?

Who possesses such mix
of fire and cool?

Is this just...
a spirit's song?

KM 17.11.11


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...the shells upon the warm sands
have taken from their own lands
the echo of their story...Enya
© Copyright 1999 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
caroline
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1 posted 11-17-1999 08:30 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Severn...this is stunning...beautiful, full of depth and longing. Brava, my friend!! Most excellent!

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Time's fun when you're having flies~~Kermit the Frog


Severn
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2 posted 11-17-1999 08:34 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Caroline - you have produced a big smile on my face and I was literally bouncing on my chair! (I had to stop to type this...) Thankyou!!!!!
Denise
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3 posted 11-17-1999 08:42 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Severn this is exquisite. Sooooo beautiful! Well done!

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Denise

hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 11-17-1999 09:18 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Wonderful words from a wonderful person
Alwye
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5 posted 11-17-1999 09:54 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Severn, this is truly an exquisite piece. Lovely, beautiful work.

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*Krista Knutson*

"To be great is to be misunderstood...." - Ralph Waldo Emerson

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6 posted 11-17-1999 10:03 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Severn ... your spirit moves me.
This is just the 'most'.



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~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Severn
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7 posted 11-17-1999 10:42 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Denise - thanks.
Ruth - that is such a lovely thing to say!
Alwye - thankyou...a for you too.
Marge - a spirit is sometimes closer to us than our actuality I think. Now is such a time. Thanks my friend.
DreamEvil
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8 posted 11-18-1999 03:57 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

My friend, you seem to have a thing for the DNA helix.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvilŠ
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"Either kill me or take me as I am,
because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade
(Marquis de Sade)


Isis
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9 posted 11-18-1999 06:10 AM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Firstly, love the title. And anything to do with one's spirit is always a winner in my book!! Bravo my friend

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

FreeByrd
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10 posted 11-18-1999 09:57 AM       View Profile for FreeByrd   Email FreeByrd   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit FreeByrd's Home Page   View IP for FreeByrd

Gotta take the risk's to get the thrill

Nice work

Who possesses such mix of fire and cool? You can... my friend

-RS


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[This message has been edited by FreeByrd (edited 11-18-1999).]
poetFemmeFatale
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11 posted 11-18-1999 10:26 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Very beautiful and heartfelt piece, my dear. I too, have been there...walking in the sand as you spoke of - and as someone said, "Silence can be loud.".....when you're deep in thought and emotion, it almost always is. Stand strong, and breathe in life for what it's worth. I have faith in you.

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~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale

Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 11-18-1999 10:35 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Severn,
You have openned the door to your feelings and it is a wonderous place. Well done.
Martie
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13 posted 11-18-1999 04:40 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

I was so moved by this poem. You are only dangerous if you don't exhale the feelings that fill you up. Your spirit song is what will give you peace.
Severn
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14 posted 11-18-1999 06:52 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

My friends...

Dream - LOL - I thought that as I centred this and just KNEW you would comment!! Thanks for the smile.

Isis - blushing here. Thankyou!

Freebyrd - yes, that is what I have learned - rather quickly!! (Love that username by the way)

Dear pFF - thankyou. Faith in myself right now is rather difficult - and I do know you have been there. Hugs to you dear friend.

Sy - that is so sweet!

Martie - alas - I truly find peace hard to attain - but there is a certain amount here, in my second home. Thanks -

Marilyn
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15 posted 11-18-1999 09:47 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Peace is a difficult journey my friend. (Supportive hugs right back atcha.) Taking the time to walk and think, scream your head off at the sky, kick the lamp posts and trash cans (careful that can hurt...ouch!). Talking with your friend and airing your soul is the path to attaining the peace you seek.

I am still travelling that path myself but have attained more then I have known in many years. You are on the right track, continue to believe in yourself.
Balladeer
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16 posted 11-18-1999 09:53 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Severn, these are top quality thoughts produced in a top quality style. My congratulations on this excellent achievement.
Severn
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17 posted 11-18-1999 09:57 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Marilyn - you are a fount of good advice my friend! Thankyou...
Ballader - wow. More blushing! Thankyou.
moonmoon
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18 posted 11-18-1999 11:24 PM       View Profile for moonmoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonmoon


Beautiful "spirit's song" indeed Severn..!

Enjoyed much..

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"No one was ever ruined from without;
The final ruin comes from within.".....Amelia E. Barr


Pepper
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19 posted 11-19-1999 06:01 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

I'm glad I didn't miss this Severn. Truly an exqusite piece!!



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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!

WhtDove
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20 posted 11-19-1999 09:10 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Rarely is it that I ditto anyone! But I will here all of them. Excellent depth, feeling and all! Very GOOD!
RainbowGirl
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21 posted 11-19-1999 09:43 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Severn: If it's just a spirit talking, then I have to wonder who talks on behalf of me, I think you do!

HUSG

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.
mirjam
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22 posted 11-29-1999 01:48 AM       View Profile for mirjam   Email mirjam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mirjam

Well if 21 replies doesn't just say something about this poem in itself i don't know what does. Severn each and every poem of yours i read touch my spirit. You have really opened yours up here and i almost feel as though i'm looking inside. Just the image of you doing exactly what marge said expresses the emotions you are feeling, and i do hope you find that peace in a world full of noise - keep searching you will find it. Loved this poem sweetie.
Ohme
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23 posted 11-29-1999 08:03 AM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

And the reward is worth the risk! Reward yourself!
rascalx
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24 posted 11-29-1999 08:10 AM       View Profile for rascalx   Email rascalx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit rascalx's Home Page   View IP for rascalx

Well done!..beautiful words..your ability to project your emotions into your visual imagery here is wonderful...I hope that you find the peace you are longing for
 
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