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Balladeer
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0 posted 1999-11-17 07:40 PM


I think I know myself quite well.
I know what makes me tick.
Like all, I have my good and bad
And so-so....take your pick.

I think I can present myself
As being fairly wise.
I wonder, though, how I must look
In someone else's eyes.

If I were looking at myself
From someone else's view,
Would I see those same qualities
I feel that I embue?

Or would I see myself a fool,
A not so valued prize,
When judged beneath the scrutiny
Of someone else's eyes?

The confidence I feel inside -
Does it come out as vain?
Do words I speak at foolish moments
Serve to foster pain?

When I display my cunning wit
To get a little rise,
Does it come out as cruelty
In someone else's eyes?

I try to be sincere. I try
To be the best I can,
To live my life the best I know
And be a friend to man.

Do I appear to be a friend
Or villain in disguise
When held up to the judgement of
Somebody else's eyes?

Sometimes I'd like to take my hands
And open wide my skin
To give the world a chance to know
The soul who lies within.

Would it be as expected or
Would it be a surprise
If we could ever see ourselves
In someone else's eyes?

© Copyright 1999 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Marge Tindal
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1 posted 1999-11-17 07:45 PM


Balladeer ... positively thought-provoking.
I really like the concept of being viewed through someone else's eyes.
A very, very nice job here.

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Severn
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2 posted 1999-11-17 07:48 PM


We'd probably get lost trying to keep up with all the 'someone else's' out there! Yes, Balladeer I have thought this myself many times and asked the question - are we who other's see us as? Or are we as we see ourselves? Great work. K
Martie
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3 posted 1999-11-17 07:50 PM


What other people see is always colored by the patina of their experience. I think it's nice that everyone sees different--Even how we view ourselves changes constantly as we change and grow and sluff off old skin. I see a man I like when I look at you through your words, Balladeer. What do you see?
Andrew Scott
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4 posted 1999-11-17 07:50 PM


Sir Balladeer: Another fine offering... what I see... a caring person with a good soul who is open to the world. A friend I've never met... a talent worthy of praise. And I'm sure a great many will say the same.
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6 posted 1999-11-17 07:51 PM


Balladeer, I can only say how I see you through my own eyes...and what a wonderful picture it is. And besides all the other good stuff about you...I'm with Marge...you like DOGS!! That in itself is an A in my book!

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Nicole
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7 posted 1999-11-17 07:52 PM


You always seem to make me think! Balladeer, I don't know you hardly at all..only by what I read, and I see some very endearing qualities to you. One of the best, ya are!
U K Hero
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8 posted 1999-11-17 07:53 PM


Damm you Balladeer how do you get that flow!!!!
Marilyn
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9 posted 1999-11-17 07:56 PM


Great poem Sir Balladeer. Do I fall short of what I wish to be or am I more then I ever expected, In someone else's eyes.
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10 posted 1999-11-17 08:07 PM


My friend, we all question our values and how we appear to others from time to time, but, we each have loveable qualities, we each have something to say that is important to others, should they choose to listen but most importantly, you're a LEO...that's it my friend...you are here, man, beast and friend, yep, I left out the lover bit, cause Leo's are no good at that bit, ooops...help my ears just got deafened in the roar of denial..*g*

ooops, did I ramble, well if I did, it's cause I cared enough to do so and I am a Leo, what more should one expect?

HUSG

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Sally S.
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11 posted 1999-11-17 09:09 PM


Within the eyes of a true friend,
I see the kind of man,
Who gives himself completely
And lends a helping hand.

Within the minds of those who know
The real, passionate you,
It would never be disputed,
Another would not do!

Within the hearts friends true,
We hold your friendship near.
So, never doubt yourself, Michael...
You see, we love our 'deer!!



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12 posted 1999-11-17 09:13 PM


Balladeer, you look pretty good through my eyes

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13 posted 1999-11-17 09:16 PM


You have a knack for putting into words, so beautifully, what we all wonder about! Gems that will be treasured for a long long time!

How about cats, do you like cats too?! hehehe


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14 posted 1999-11-17 09:21 PM


We all see you as wise, and not vain.
You're a wonderful, warm, caring, person and that's how I view you through my eyes. The list could go on here but I don't think their is enough room. hehe

Now as for me I don't believe that I view myself like others do. Lots to think about here. Excellent poetry but it always is!
Thanks for being you buddy and don't ever change that!!!!


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15 posted 1999-11-17 10:03 PM


See my post in response to this one

--Kess


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Seymour Tabin
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16 posted 1999-11-17 10:06 PM


Balladeer,
I second all of the above. And as far as poetry goes, in my humble opinion you are rare. How rare will come only after you are gone. But I intend to enjoy you while you are still here. The poem is a delight.

Balladeer
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17 posted 1999-11-17 10:33 PM


Marge & Severn...thank you both.
Martie..I see a man blessed to be associated with so many friends.
Andrew..I am indeed your friend. Count on it.
Caroline..Thank you...and I LOVE dogs!
Satiate...I thank you, too.
UK Hero....Beats me!
Marilyn..You would never fall short.
Rainbow...Not good lovers? You're lion!!!
Sally S..That's a wonderful poem and response. Thank you.
Hoot..You Know how you look through mine!
Dsnyder..Thank you and I love cats! Let's swap recipes!
WhtDve..If you viewed yourself as I do, you would be very happy.
Sy..When I'm gone, I'll be VERY rare! Thank you, friend.

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18 posted 1999-11-18 12:39 PM


Balladeer, if you were looking though my eyes you would see a VERY talented poet, a man with a wonderful imagination, and a caring soul. Your work never falls short.
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19 posted 1999-11-18 06:56 AM


Balladeer, if you were looking at yourself through my eyes.........Do I even need to go on?....LOL....Another wonderful poem pal....you never cease to amaze me every morning!!
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20 posted 1999-11-18 07:45 AM


I know my friends see me more kindly than I view myself. *S* (And I'm not about to suggest they need glasses. *G*)

This "someone" sees you as a delightful man, with incredible intelligence and a talent for making us "see" things that make us better persons but that we'd miss without you pointing the way. I could list many sterling qualities (almost as many as Toe has *EG*)... but I'd rather just say I see a friend I'm very glad entered my life. Well done, 'Deer one!

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21 posted 1999-11-18 10:25 AM


hey can I ditto all of the above? specially suthern cause she loves it when I ditto her *g*

no really great poem, questioning the worth of your own self esteem, I really like this. And I know just what you mean, I don't feel "pretty" inside or out till someone elses eyes make it so. And you know the owners of the eyes mean a lot as to the value of the view....so...what I am trying to say...is that if you add up all of the opinions of the "eyes" above, you are a very rich man

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22 posted 1999-11-18 04:23 PM


A short reply in black and blue
to make a response there to read,
I see before me a fellow who
is not a friend in need.

For I only know him through written word,
funny, cute, kind or sincere,
never would I think him absurd,
but only as our own special brand of 'Deer.

He poses questions never silly,
and professes through word to teach,
his thought process never willy-nilly;
if I could hear him, I'd like his speech.

I've learned much from ol' 'Deer's prose,
come to find out what he knows,
and we've just scratched the surface near
to what he could teach, our good 'ol 'Deer.

So to see him through his eyes, you bet!
a comet on the fly;
for to catch his goodness in my net,
'tis guaranteed I'm gonna try.

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Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


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23 posted 1999-11-18 11:02 PM


Sunshine, thank you for this wonderful response. You don't need a net.
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24 posted 1999-11-18 11:15 PM


I am an ugly mystery
Of thinly woven lies
Do I look sincere
Through someone else's eyes?

Balladeer...this one is a) wonderfully written b) Thought provoking and c) hits home with me.....for so many different reasons.

Great work!

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25 posted 1999-11-19 08:00 AM


Wunnerful, Deer...

Are we what we perceive ourselves to be?... or rather what others observe in us???

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26 posted 1999-11-20 01:26 AM


Wow!! You always seem to make me think!! That was great!!

Bridgette



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Lost Dreamer
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27 posted 1999-12-03 06:50 PM


Can a man
who walks,
talks,
and writes
with such
wisdom,
be ever
seen
as anything
less then
thoughtful,
full of life,
and brilliant?

I think not at least through my eyes you are one of a kind, and you wear it well.




[This message has been edited by Lost Dreamer (edited 12-03-1999).]

RobertB
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28 posted 1999-12-03 06:55 PM


Bravo Balladeer!!!
Elizabeth Santos
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29 posted 1999-12-03 07:41 PM


I think that poetry refects the poet, and you sure look good to me!
Liz

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