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Obedient Oblivion

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RobertB
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0 posted 11-17-1999 06:43 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for RobertB

Obedient Oblivion


She drove a 1988
Esquire station wagon
with the driver's side window
stuck in the Up position
which is best
because it kept
the elements away from her life
while taking kids to school
five minutes before the bell,
laundry on Mondays,
keeping the beer cold
and the remote where it should be
Except a window stuck
in the Up position
can’t keep out the numbness
of lonely nights
staring at the ceiling
weeping
under heavy breathing…
alcohol laden
while she dreamed
of coming home,
parking the Esquire in the garage,
then closing the door
and leave the engine running.

RB




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if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.
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Iloveit
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1 posted 11-17-1999 06:47 PM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

wow, what a sad picture, real well written
RobertB
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2 posted 11-17-1999 08:54 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

Thanks...it came to me as I was sitting in a McDonalds drive through and a lady in front of me was driving a 1988 Esquire wagon and she had to open the door to pay the girl for her food and she dropped all her money on the pavement. I felt sorry for her and wrote this poem as soon as I got home.

Robert

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if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.
hoot_owl_rn
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Whew, this packs a punch
Elizabeth Santos
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4 posted 11-17-1999 09:21 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

I hope never to find myself in front of you at McDonalds drive through and have you so vividly portray my life.
Elizabeth
Denise
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5 posted 11-17-1999 09:27 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

You also can take anything and write something great, can't you?!

Your explanation just reminded me of something similar that happened to my
Mom, except she was on a bus with 2 or 3? of us kids, at rush hour and dropped all her fare money for her and us.....and that glaring bus driver...oh, I can't tell you had bad I felt for her. Sometimes life realllly stinks!

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Denise

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Darn Robert you got all that out of seeing her drop her change? Man oh man, I hope she don't go home and leave the car runnin in the garage. Good one though! I love how you come up with these.
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7 posted 11-17-1999 09:29 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

From such a miniscule happenstance you created an excellent piece. Definitely the mark of a poet.
RobertB
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8 posted 11-17-1999 10:10 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

it just hit me..her life and that window stuck.....then it all poured out of me onto the screen

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if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.
Seymour Tabin
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RobertB,
I enjoyed the poem, well done.
RobertB
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10 posted 11-18-1999 06:19 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

thank you seymore!

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if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.
Martie
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This was great Robert! So poignant, sad and real. The slice of life poem is my favorite.
RobertB
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12 posted 11-18-1999 11:12 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

a slice of pie yes....coconut cream is my favorrrrr....what?? Oh slice of life....nevermind.

:-}

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