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Magic Potion?

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RSEvans
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0 posted 11-17-1999 03:33 PM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for RSEvans

My attempt to join Bal's shadow....

"Hi y'all", he said with a southern drawl
As he took the stand in cape and shawl
"I'm sorry to have kept ya waitin so long,"
His voice was old but yet sing-song.

"I'm now around 80...", he said with a grin
His boyish charm flashing from deep within
"but I feel much younger and you can too.
This tonic I sell can do it for you."

"It's no ordinary tonic", he went on to say,
"It's no accident that I'm here today.
This tonic's a wonder, no doubt about it
You'll wonder how you ever lived without it."

He opened a vial and wafted the scent
Then down towards an old woman he bent.
"Smell that?", he said, asking curiously.
"Smells like everlasting life to me."

The old woman bent inclining her head
She tried hard to smell it, then simply said
"I don't smell a thing, not a thing at all.
"Exactly!", he yelled as he stood again tall.

"You want what I have its abundantly clear,
A cure for your hopes and loves and fear
It's easy to gain, won't cost you a toll
Just your faith your trust and your soul."

"You see this tonic I have in this vial,"
He alluded again and said with a smile,
"Is more than a liquid gleaned from man
It will cure all your ills as only it can."

"It's God's own love, which is freely given,
Given to those who will only accept him.
I wish you could feel as I do right now
And listen closely and I'll tell you how."

"Don't place your faith in immortal potion
Or curses or hexes or things of that notion,
Just simply believe that He gave his Son
To die on the cross for everyone."

I smiled with a tear at his simple solution
That we had been led to believe was a potion.
I knelt there that day, near the old man
And gave all to God, now I understand.


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Once I was brilliant, now I no longer shine, but the twinkle in my eye speaks of another time.


[This message has been edited by RSEvans (edited 11-17-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Rob Evans - All Rights Reserved
Michael
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1 posted 11-17-1999 04:26 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Wow,
You have outdone yourself, Robert. This one was great and what a message to convey. No potion, indeed...


michael
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2 posted 11-17-1999 08:13 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

It's fantastic, yep - that's the right word.
hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 11-17-1999 09:23 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Wonderfully written RSE.......take your bow

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Denise
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4 posted 11-17-1999 09:37 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Great poem, great message!

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Denise

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5 posted 11-17-1999 11:26 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Wonderful poem! I loved it!

Did you know we have a Spiritual Forum too?
If you have anymore like this I would love to have you post them in Spiritual. I'm sure others would enjoy to read them too!
Balladeer
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6 posted 11-17-1999 11:58 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Good work, Robert. Ain't storytelling fun?!
poetFemmeFatale
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7 posted 11-18-1999 10:32 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Ah indeed, I do love storytelling poetically!! Sigh* one of the ONLY reasons I tolerate 'ol Balladeer! I just LOVE to read his ditties, cause you never know what you're standing in - - LOL to Balladeer....
My dear brother, on a more serious note, this is superbly and splendidly done!! Not at all what I was expecting, and you're right....it's not magic - just love...but then, at times, aren't they the same? They sure feel the same to me! Very nice story!

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~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 11-18-1999 10:42 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

RSEvans,
I can't add much more to the above,except Congradulations on a wonderful poem.
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9 posted 11-18-1999 11:09 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Well done! I don't think you're standing in anyone's shadow. *S*
RSEvans
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10 posted 11-18-1999 11:11 AM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

Thank you all...and welcome back Femme..we missed you. This is the only way I pay homage to the ones I appreciate the most. Bal is indeed a master storyteller...

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Once I was brilliant, now I no longer shine, but the twinkle in my eye speaks of another time.
Iloveit
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11 posted 11-18-1999 01:00 PM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

RS this is beautiful and really well done, yep you join the ranks of the story tellers
Deb Lynne
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12 posted 11-18-1999 02:31 PM       View Profile for Deb Lynne   Email Deb Lynne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Deb Lynne

RS...you shall be including among the master storytellers! You guys make me want to strive that much harder!!! Loved this one!!
Toerag
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13 posted 11-18-1999 02:35 PM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Very good story in rhyme! I liked this....(Don't that Balladeer just make ya sick sometimes?)......But he does influence and motivate such great works as this doesn't he?.....
Martie
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14 posted 11-18-1999 03:19 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

I echo what's already been said, great story and message here RS.
Ohme
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15 posted 11-18-1999 04:10 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

RS, can only say Amen !

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Yesterday is history, tomorrow just a mystery. And if today is good to me how could I ask for more?
RSEvans
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16 posted 11-19-1999 07:10 AM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

**wiping a tear away**They like me...they really, really like me...
Thanks everyone for making a poor hillbilly feel at home.

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Once I was brilliant, now I no longer shine, but the twinkle in my eye speaks of another time.
Pepper
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17 posted 11-19-1999 11:14 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

I echo all above RS.....Great story!

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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!

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