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The Jackal
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A

0 posted 1999-11-17 02:19 PM


if i fall down and dont get up
will that mean ive had enough
or perhaps i like it better
closer to the ground..
a solitary wrinkle does fall
upon me
adds much to the ugly
underneath
where mother nature
allows me to be released..



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Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA
1 posted 1999-11-17 03:08 PM


Better to be on the ground than "in" the ground. Interesting last set of lines... not quite sure where you're headed with it, but it has me thinking.
Systematic Decay
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since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
2 posted 1999-11-17 09:45 PM


Intiguing...you have me thinking about what those last lines may mean....

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.



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