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Severn
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0 posted 11-16-1999 09:09 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn

Lessons sigh
fly
on wings

fly the path of
a suffering dove

this light far-fallen

Fallen past all myth
she's facing
truth

as fable gifts
exchange
of dreaming for

forget

heart's easing
a
star's death

a tired life
yearning her relief

her memory's loss

Loss of aching soul
she's shining
now

over the alone
adrift
with a wish for

forget
just forget...

dream no more
lost light

KM 16.11.99


[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 11-16-1999).]

[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 11-16-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 11-16-1999 09:26 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Severn this is both sad and beautiful. Well done.

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Denise

Lynn
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2 posted 11-16-1999 10:04 PM       View Profile for Lynn   Email Lynn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lynn


I have to agree with Denise. Beautifully done.

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NOT IN VAIN
If I can stop one heart from breaking
I shall not live in vain;
If I can ease one life
from aching,
Or cool one pain,
Or help one fainting robin
Into his nest again,
I shall not live in vain.
~Emily Dickinson
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3 posted 11-16-1999 10:18 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

The form is a wondrous rendition of the DNA helix, whether by accident or design it adds much to the effect of this piece.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©

Pepper
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4 posted 11-16-1999 10:20 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Yes. Both sad and beautiful....I liked this much Severn.....

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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!

Marilyn
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5 posted 11-16-1999 10:58 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

wonderfully written Severn. Powerful words.
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6 posted 11-17-1999 12:06 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

This has a haunting quality to it, Severn. It's very effective.
mc
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7 posted 11-17-1999 12:53 AM       View Profile for mc   Email mc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit mc's Home Page   View IP for mc

It is beautiful and it transmits a strange sense of peace.

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mcestrada
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8 posted 11-17-1999 12:58 AM       View Profile for Alexandrine   Email Alexandrine   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Alexandrine

Your poem is like a delicate butterfly living only for today. Beautiful, sad, evolving into something else. I thoroughly enjoyed this.
Martie
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9 posted 11-17-1999 01:36 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Severn, go with the way you have with words. I think it will take you places.
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10 posted 11-17-1999 02:07 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Severn, so bittersweet this piece, beautiful and sad at the same time. My thoughts are with you.
Ruth
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11 posted 11-17-1999 02:19 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Severn,
I like the form agree with DreamEvil.
Severn
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12 posted 11-17-1999 07:23 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Thankyou all my friends.
There are and at this time!

Martie - that's really encouraging - thankyou.

Ruth - yes, bittersweet indeed, Thanks my friend - for being there.
poetFemmeFatale
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13 posted 11-18-1999 10:37 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

I agree with mc....I felt a strange sense of peace likewise....Sometimes, it helps to write of closure - maybe that's what I felt...closure. Forgetting and moving on in our lives is one of the hardest of obstacles....I find myself struggling with it everyday. Be strong, and continue writing with the beauty you have here - very uplifting even in hard times. Thank you for sharing.

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~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale

Severn
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14 posted 11-18-1999 07:11 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Oh pFF - I just have to say the graciousness of your reply made me want to cry! Thankyou so much...
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15 posted 11-18-1999 07:50 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

In the cocoon, waiting to emerge and find her wings. Oh, beautiful butterfly, thy name is Severn.
Beautiful thoughts tied together in this one.

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~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Severn
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16 posted 11-18-1999 08:17 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

It's funny, but not so long ago I did describe myself to someone as being very much like a butterfly - you must have read my mind - though I didn't include the beautiful part!!!
You honour me Marge.
moonmoon
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17 posted 11-18-1999 11:28 PM       View Profile for moonmoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonmoon


This one had my soul 'fluttering'..!!!!
Thanks for the read..

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"No one was ever ruined from without;
The final ruin comes from within.".....Amelia E. Barr


 
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