dont really like this but i told myself id spit someting out and here it is

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Open Poetry #4

dont really like this but i told myself id spit someting out and here it is

Kevin

Senior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

0 posted 1999-11-15 10:10 PM

fingers dance across the keys
to enchantning melodies
that only fall on poets ears,
singing of love, hopes, and fears.
the poet asks not of this sense
just ponders writing in years hence.
for living in a world so vast
poetic fingers cant dance too fast.

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

1 posted 1999-11-15 10:15 PM

This is wonderful, Kevin! Keep spittin'em out!

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Sally S.
Senior Member

since 1999-06-07

Posts 847
Ohio

2 posted 1999-11-15 11:34 PM

Well, this is music to my ears...er eyes. It's lovely. What don't you like about it????

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

3 posted 1999-11-16 09:40 AM

Hey, you can spit them out like that anyday

Ohme
Senior Member

since 1999-07-17

Posts 816
Texas

4 posted 1999-11-16 10:33 AM

Kevin, what did ya not like? It's music to my ears as well.

If this is a prelude go spit some more out!

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Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 1999-11-16 10:33 AM

Kevin,
I guess Hoot said it. You spit pretty good.

Kevin

Senior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

6 posted 1999-11-16 02:51 PM

thanks guys
i really didnt like it because of the tempo
and rythm were all off but i guess its growing on me =)

Toerag
Member Ascendant

since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

7 posted 1999-11-16 03:15 PM

Well Kevin, Ya puked enuff,
Cuz your spittin up
Is so much
Better than my thought out stuff.

So keep up the spit,
And aim it straight,
Cuz compared to this,
My "crap's second rate!

[This message has been edited by Toerag (edited 11-16-1999).]

Iloveit
Senior Member

since 1999-09-02

Posts 1121
NM

8 posted 1999-11-16 03:19 PM

almost didn't read cause of the title lol, but glad I did, this is nice

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