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Tara Simms
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Honea Path, SC USA

0 posted 1999-11-15 09:36 PM



Edge of Eden

Nothing around for miles,
just us in the Carolina forest.
We take a tour of the local waterfalls,
6 in one afternoon,
kissing our way through them all.
Posing for a picture at Whitewater Falls,
English tourists snap the photo.
If they only knew the scene they missed
at the bottom of the river.
I feed you grapes as we pass
Bridal Veil Falls,
A small outpouring of water
from the rocks along the road.
My fingers caress your lips
as I slide the fruit into the mouth
that has so recently pleasured me.
Standing behind Dry Falls,
cold spray misting around us,
we kiss as people pass by.
You carve my name into a bench,
a reminder that we have been there.
Calisajaw Falls has you sprinting
over the rocks, me at your heels.
You take pictures,
reminders of our perfect day.
You hold my hand as you help me over the rocks,
sneaking in a kiss here and there.
A picture perfect pond,
feeding into a manmade waterfall.
A lone swan glides across the water,
her elegant silhouette a thing of beauty.
We sit on the edge of Eden
kissing, touching, watching
as the swan swims near.
Atop Glen Falls, alone.
You follow me up the rocks
where we kiss some more.
Our talk turns serious:
you’re delving into my psyche,
gaining insight to my soul.
We hold each other
in the dwindling daylight.
You want to get naked again,
take me there,
as you did at the first waterfall.
But night is falling
and so is my heart.
Staying in the woods
could be dangerous.

© Copyright 1999 Tara Simms - All Rights Reserved
DreamEvil
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1 posted 1999-11-15 09:42 PM


Excellent verse my friend, palpably passionate.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©


hoot_owl_rn
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Glen Hope, PA USA
2 posted 1999-11-15 09:44 PM


Whooo hooo....hey, I want the location of those falls
Denise
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3 posted 1999-11-15 09:46 PM


This is beautiful, Tara. (seems you've been quite busy lately!)

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Denise


Alwye
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In the space between moments
4 posted 1999-11-15 10:58 PM


This is definitely beautiful..paints a wonderfully vivid picture.

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*Krista Knutson*

"To be great is to be misunderstood...." - Ralph Waldo Emerson


Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
5 posted 1999-11-15 11:26 PM


I love this Tara! You've described the place and the passion.....now, give us the directions!

Tara Simms
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6 posted 1999-11-15 11:38 PM


Thanks everyone! Directions? Go straight into their heart, keep going, even when you reach that point where you're scared to go on. Once you've reach the Point of No Return, you'll know you've made it!
Balladeer
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7 posted 1999-11-16 12:26 PM


Tara, you are giving new meaning to the phrase "falling in love". Well done again!
Christopher
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8 posted 1999-11-16 01:22 AM


Awesome Tara and good job on the format...gave the feeling!
Pepper
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9 posted 1999-11-16 11:09 AM


Beautiful with such wonderful imagery....Liked this much Tara!....

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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!


suthern
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10 posted 1999-11-16 11:18 AM


Absolutely beautiful! *S*
Iloveit
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11 posted 1999-11-16 12:22 PM


yep will ditto suthern on this one...makes me mish.....
moonmoon
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12 posted 1999-11-18 11:32 PM



Whoa...."under the water falls'??...mmmmmm...looks like you are living my fantasies girl friend....

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Tara Simms
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Honea Path, SC USA
13 posted 1999-11-19 10:25 PM


Thanks for the boost, moonmoon! I think you're my greatest cheerleader. And to let you know, I'm living MY fantasies.

Balladeer, my Chris gives new meaning to the term "being in love".

Thanks for the read, everyone!

Bright Melody
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since 1999-11-06
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O'Fallon Illinois
14 posted 1999-11-19 11:30 PM


I loved this! It was a great expression of feelings. Great job!

Eden

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