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My dear
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My dear |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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My deer She stood in a summer morn, Motionless, after dawn, Where gentle light painted round, Shadowed figures on the ground. Beautiful, her head held high, Eyes that searched woods and sky. A picture of grandeurs dwell, Only its breath broke the spell. She lingers, my conscious brain, Amongst, many treasures lain And upon a summers morn, I can see her in the dawn. Beauty grows in fragile plumbs, Only when the mind succumbs. I pray your mind be germane, To treasures, in your domain. Where lies the beauty of sight, Also lies the soul of light. |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
nice. ------------------ Once I was brilliant, now I no longer shine, but the twinkle in my eye speaks of another time. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well, whether to your "deer" or your "dear", it reads beautifully, either way. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Ok Sy - this is gorgeous! Mind if I print it please? One little question - which spelling of dear/deer is correct?  K |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Hey! Leave Sy alone! If he wants to write a poem about me, he can. Thank you, Sy. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Oh Balladeer - you need a lesson in humility! - LOL |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well, now I'm ROTFLOL - can you see 'Deer as a she? Oh my, this will give Toe plenty to rag on 'Deer about. 'Deer, best be more careful in the future... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Beautiful as always Sey |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Splendid, Seymour! (And I think both spellings are exactly as he had intended!) I ditto all the above, this is truly a lovely picture! ------------------ Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Denise, Well you win the prize that's exactly what I intended. I new it would get a rise out of anyone that read it. Denise go to the head of the class. RSEvans, Thanks. Sunshine, Go to the head of the class with Denise. Severn, Both, thank you. Bal, What was you doing in the woods that time of morning? Hoot, Thank you deer, dear. Sunshine, Are you doing a little sugestive inspiring? Denise, Your a sweet heart, Thanks again. |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
well, FOOEY!! If I'd read this a few moments earlier, I'd have gotten to at least the back of the class!!!!! It's beautiful, Sy. But,...um..I thought you prefered "Doe s" (Not that there's anything wrong with 'deer  ) |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Go to the head of the class? Really? Oh boy, this is exciting, I never did that before! Again, great poem, Seymour! ------------------ Denise |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Simply lovely Sy....... ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sally, You can stand in front of the class anytime. Thanks for the comment. Denise, You would stand out in any class. *L* Pepper, And you are simply sweet. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Well you're just too clever Sy! And I thought you were merely simple...hehe - no I'm never going to let you live that down!!! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Last time I was sent to the head of the class, it was to wear a dunce cap. So I'll share, and Denise can have it. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, deer ... what can the matter be? The dear is in my sight. If Seymour can't tell a dear from a deer how will I ever get it right? Seymour was just having folly, what a deer, deer one. Now look what he has accomplished ... He's gone and made a little pun! ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Severn, Enjoyed your comment, and never is a long time. Sunshine, Did you ask Denise if she wants to share? Marge, Thank you for the little poem, but a pun is a pun is a pun. |
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