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DreamEvil
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0 posted 11-15-1999 01:08 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

So kill me then
she says
my hand locked
around her throat
like a leech
clinging to its host
Okay responds
a cheery voice
that is my own
yet not
Hellish glee
lights
my maniacal eyes
reveling
in her submission
hand tightens
around
ivory white throat
dispassionate smiles
tug at my mouth
with her every change
in ever-purpling hue
lifting
her off the ground
adds speed
to the chameleon change
of color
she goes through
her body's convulsing
and silent plea
extinguish rage
and falling away
I look at these
killer's hands
sobbing wracks me
as I become
what I despise
Her hands cradle
my tremulous head
rocking me
into desperately
needed peace
easing me past
another fit


©1999 DreamEvil

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DreamEvil
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1 posted 11-15-1999 01:11 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

This is a work of fiction meant to show the depths of Intermittent Explosive Disorder. Please view it as such.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©

Skyfyre
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2 posted 11-15-1999 01:14 AM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Disturbing -- but then, mental ilness does that, doesn't it? A chilling and apt description, my friend. The clarifier was a wise precaution.

--Kess

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You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

Beki
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3 posted 11-15-1999 04:04 AM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

I am glad you clarified its origin, Scott..it is very well written, flows well and the frenzied loss of control is reflected in the short lined form. Good work.
suicidal dreams
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since 09-28-1999
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4 posted 11-15-1999 07:08 PM       View Profile for suicidal dreams   Email suicidal dreams   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suicidal dreams

Nice piece here I really liked it much

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life is short kill quick
Systematic Decay
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That place with padded walls a


5 posted 11-15-1999 07:16 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

I can relate to this all too well, my friend......

Very well done.

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.


Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


6 posted 11-16-1999 01:31 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

WOW!
I felt this one through and through...a tidlewave of anger cascading down the page!
Dark Angel
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7 posted 11-16-1999 04:06 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Soul-Brother, WOW, my Friend, I liked this very much, I echo Christopher's comment.

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


PhaerieChild
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8 posted 11-16-1999 04:19 AM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

Really like this one alot!! Maybe it explains the anger I feel lately and I don't know where it comes from.

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If you love me like music, I'll be your song.
~Heart~ Dreamboat Annie

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho


Severn
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9 posted 11-16-1999 08:36 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Brilliant - tightly controlled piece I feel - it leads the reader tensely to the conclusion.
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