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Behind the Waterfall
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Behind the Waterfall |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA 
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Behind the Waterfall I can hear the roar of the water as it cascades down the mountain, feel the cool spray on my skin, your breath on me as you take me in your arms pulling me close, my body melting. An older couple laughs as they pass by, amused by our display of affection. I look up at you, my blue eyed cowboy, and feel my heart falling faster than the water that rushes past. I lose myself in the electric current that passes between us. Behind the waterfall I surrender to you. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Works well for me it does. ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Julie Jordan Scott Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 146Bakersfield, CA USA |
Tara, if it didn't sound so weird I would say I feel as if I am there with you and your blue eyed cowboy!!!! *sigh* What a lucky man he is!!! (And remember, PINK is my favorite color! But I would settle for PURPLE!) ------------------ Julie Jordan Scott is a Freelance Writer and Public Speaker, but her favorite role is that of Mommy! Visit her website at http://www.5passions.com |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Very romantic and loving! Works for me if I was with someone like that behind a waterfall. hehe...great job! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Very nicely done, Tara |
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Lolita Junior Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 44Buffalo, NY, America |
I found it wonderful, i like the way you connected the current of the water with the feeling of electricity between you both. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Tara, I LIKE this. It presented a different view of the waterfalls I've visited. Intriguing ....Hmmmmm! ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Thank you everybody.  I just love that man! Julie, still bucking to be a bridesmaid huh? |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Whooo hooo....like that one I do Hey bridesmaids?....you gonna invite me too? |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Lovely, Tara. Very Sweet. |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
and love and water flows...beautiful analogy, Tara... ------------------ Once I was brilliant, now I no longer shine, but the twinkle in my eye speaks of another time. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Whew!...this one brings back memories for me...16 and behind the waterfall...'twas wonderfull, as this poem is. Thanks for the rekindling, tara. michael |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
That darn gunslinger! Just rides in here and gets the girl. Well, we're a little short on waterfalls in Florida but I get the picture....and a beautiful one it is, too. Very nicely done, Tara. |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Ball, don't call him a gunslinger, you'll get rumors started about me and Gunslinger! lol Ruth, before we start planning a wedding, he'll need to commit to moving here! Michael, RS, and Sally: thanks for the read. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautifully romantic! I love this! ------------------ Denise |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
Oops I posted the 'waterfall' response to the wrong poem... Moi likes ALL your work ... |
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FreeByrd Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 267 |
Sensual.... Brought that loving moment back for me once again. Mine was last March in the mountains of Huatulco Mexico. Thank you -RS ------------------ |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
A Gorgeous poem.....saving this one Tara Wonderful imagery my dear....... ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Denise,thank you for the comment! I love having my stuff read! Pepper, I feel honored to have you save this! FreeByrd, moments like these need to be treasured forever. They don't come along often enough. |
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