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RobertB
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0 posted 1999-11-14 10:29 PM


Leaving Our Mark

What more selfish desire
can be that of a man
than to leave
a record of his existence
carved in stone
written on paper
or sketched to canvas?
Yet I pursue
a mark long lasting
to etch my being
on living tissue
writing my name on bone
dipping my pen
in the well of marrow
from which the heart pumps
the legend of my passing.

Robert


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if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.

© Copyright 1999 RobertB - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 1999-11-14 10:33 PM


This is beautiful, Robert. Very nice.

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Denise


Marge Tindal
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2 posted 1999-11-14 10:35 PM


You write the sentiments of many.
So eloquently done.

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RobertB
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3 posted 1999-11-14 10:35 PM


I was going to make a "cute" reply Denise. But I think that "Thank you" should be all I say!

Robert

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if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.

RobertB
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4 posted 1999-11-14 10:36 PM


and to you Marge..a sincere "thanks" also.

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if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.

WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
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5 posted 1999-11-15 12:53 PM


Well I was gonna say something about leaving your "mark." But I think I won't! hehe
'Tis a deep one there Robert. Well done!

Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
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Pennsylvania
6 posted 1999-11-15 04:36 AM


Yes, the legacy of who we are, engraved in the hearts of our sons and daughters, is an inheritance left to mankind
Elizabeth

Sindab Lafeteran
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Dubai
7 posted 1999-11-15 06:29 AM


This message was inappropriate.

[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 11-16-1999).]

Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
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8 posted 1999-11-15 06:52 AM


Did I misinterpret this poem?
hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
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Glen Hope, PA USA
9 posted 1999-11-15 09:40 AM


Robert...I believe you have already left a mark my friend
RobertB
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since 1999-09-26
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Champaign, IL
10 posted 1999-11-15 06:19 PM


Thanks Sindab....you please me immensely.


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if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.

Andrew Scott
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11 posted 1999-11-15 06:40 PM


Alright Mr. RobertB! ... I read this and thought "What is it that we're leaving our mark on, much less with?" Hmmm... not really sure, but I liked the power within this piece. Then... I read Ms. Santos' response and I think... "Ya, works for me." And then Sindab says you're a sick puppy and I think "Ok, perhaps something deeper is going on here." And then I had to answer the phone, which destroyed my train of thought and I'm just not sure what I'm reading... only that I like it. So... am I a sick puppy too, or just an average joe looking to leave his mark? You've made me think on a Monday and that's not fair.
RobertB
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Champaign, IL
12 posted 1999-11-15 09:32 PM


hehehe..I love to make people think... Sindab's (sinbad??) seemed like a joke so I will treat it as such. In another forum I posted this poem and got my ass chewed out but good. It is to the point now that I am on the verge of not giving a Tinker's damn about anything anybody says. Yet here in this forum I do...these people are GOOD people. It is a feeling the whole group has...so Sindab...I really do hope you are joking.

RB

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if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.

Nan
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13 posted 1999-11-16 08:47 PM


To Sindab...
A search of your profile indicates that this is your one and only post on the Passions Forums. That says to me that you registered this pseudonym for the sole purpose of hiding behind a derogatory comment against a poet. This disparaging practice is one that is not condoned in this forum.

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