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And Then I come Down (Revised and Reposted from OP2)

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Systematic Decay
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That place with padded walls a


0 posted 11-14-1999 09:43 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Systematic Decay

There is a place of which I often dream
A place where the people say what they mean
Where hate and jealousy are never seen
A place where love never turns envy green

A place where tortises mingle with hares
A place where the bliss is always aware
We're naked as newborns and no one cares
This dream world of mine is just a place where.....

In my lovers eyes dwell crystal jewels divine
In this place I'm no longer the swine
It's a place where I can go back in time
Undo the damage wrought on me and mine

Butterfly kisses bestowed on my cheeks
I close my eyes, there is no need to speak
A world where I've no reason to be meek
It's a place to run from a realm so bleak

It's a place where exotic birds will flock
A place that eats away the horror, shock
With the freedom of a drifting boat undocked
It's a secret place that I have unlocked

It's a place that's home to the unicorns
And baby caribou with velvet horns
I have no more disasters left to mourn
It's a place where I'm happy I was born

It's a place where I am welcome and loved
A place where I am never pushed or shoved
Where I'm not a left hand in a right glove
A place where I'm peaceful, and free as a dove

A place that is kissed in bright golden light
A place where nobody pettily fights
A place where everything's lovely, day or night
A place where I know things will be alright


And then I come down



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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.


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Master
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Boston, MA


1 posted 11-14-1999 09:55 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Sounded like you had to force the rhyme a couple of times, otherwise very powerful.
hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
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Glen Hope, PA USA


2 posted 11-15-1999 09:13 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Shame we have to come down my friend isn't it? Ah, could there be such a place and could all the world be as such, it would indeed be eden all over again
Severn
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3 posted 11-15-1999 05:28 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

I don't think you could ever be swine SD!
Great writing there.
Systematic Decay
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That place with padded walls a


4 posted 11-15-1999 08:23 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

Thanks everyone for replies.

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.


Denise
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5 posted 11-15-1999 08:26 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is filled with many lovely thoughts. Would be nice to find such a place as this! Only in dreams, for now!

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Denise

 
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