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The day before the execution

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Master
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0 posted 11-14-1999 04:05 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Disturbed by writings on the wall
And wild thoughts that will not settle
I see the sun through rusty metal
I hear the silence in the hall
I think tomorrow is the day
The clock is showing half passed three
The only one who’s here with me--
A friendly spider eats his prey
A pencil which was long like life
Is now less than a third its length
And yet it still contains its strength
To help me breathe, to help me strive
My days go by with speed of lightning
Even my nights seem way to brief
I know, I’m lacking time to live
Just give me time to finish writing
His deadly work appears so neat
The friendly spider weaves his web
Hand of the clock takes one more step
As one more line falls on the sheet
“The life I lived was an illusion
I will awake and it will fade”
Upon the paper is the date--
The day before the execution
© Copyright 1999 Andrey Kneller - All Rights Reserved
Ohme
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1 posted 11-14-1999 04:16 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

Seems Texas leads the nation in number of executions and I have often wondered how the prisoners feel about the value of their own life. Thanks for sharing this poem. Enjoyed.

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Yesterday is history, tomorrow just a mystery. And if today is good to me how could I ask for more?
Munda
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2 posted 11-14-1999 05:12 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

Many years ago I tried to capture the feeling of the day before the execution. I never could capture it as well as you did.
Very well done !

[This message has been edited by Munda (edited 11-14-1999).]
Denise
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3 posted 11-14-1999 08:30 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

An excellent piece of writing, Master. Very powerful.

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Denise

Master
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4 posted 11-14-1999 09:57 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thanks everybody, I wrote this right after I read a book by Nabokov, called "an invitation to an execution." Very powerful book and I recommend it to you, if you have a chance, read it!
Systematic Decay
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That place with padded walls a


5 posted 11-14-1999 10:02 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

This one is very good, I really like it.

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.


First__Knight
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6 posted 11-14-1999 10:04 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

This made me not want to reach the end of the poem.....Like I knew the ending and wanted it to continue like the steps of time.
hoot_owl_rn
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7 posted 11-15-1999 09:17 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Nicely told tale
Sally S.
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8 posted 11-15-1999 09:21 AM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

oooooo.....the type of poem that brings chills. Nice work!!
Master
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9 posted 11-15-1999 05:23 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

THanks everybody!
Severn
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10 posted 11-15-1999 05:26 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

WOW!
Impressive!
I really like the four lines:
'A pencil which was long like life...
To help me breathe, to help me strive'
 
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