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Severn
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0 posted 11-14-1999 06:44 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn

Night Watch

Cool hush of these machines
life-leasing liquids
drip
clear demeaning the red
of useless life blood
weak without the juice
encased in plastic

Your spirit concealed
in dry flesh
your language of love lost
as you forget the day
the month...my name

So still

Visitors no more than two
you sleep by drugs
and fight for flight
when you awake
to the prison of the bed
your moan youíre trapped in

and no diagnosis but a bleed in the brain

I conquered my fear
of lifts and tight places
for you
cocooned in the top floor
of this house
of white cloth
and unfriendly medicinal names

I gently tuck this sheet
about your fragile
thin frame
you seem the child
and I the mother
in this space
of sickness dreaming

Obs read every hour

Light blinking on that machine
mocking the regularity
of the aeroplane eyes
that winged me to you
with such impassive haste

and now I sit here
staring out over
foreign hills
in the city
of my birth
Iíve not seen for
seventeen years
staring out over
your wheeled bed
past bandages and
other supplies important
at the lights of streets
you donít know youíre in

Where are the bandages for the soul...?

I touch those lights
with my eyes
but my heart is stretched
beyond them
such loss in this
nightmare fortnight
I hope for a jump
into a tomorrow
of perpetual forget
free from sorrow's hand

The sign in red says safety level three

That pretty blue vest
with lovely long ribbons
tied to the unforgiving
metal of the bed
resists the meek force of you
and catís paw bandages encase
your futile hands complete
for if you
fall
or sit
or rip away

the plaster moulding that intruding tube
irritating at your neck
you could die
or so the nurses say
for when your eyes
are dull and wide
and seeing
you fight
the wealth of health
sluicing through your skin
and sometimes you say
you really want to die

and still

I sit
curled in the grave
of this dead leather chair
wishing you would wake
and walk and sing
in the rain again
but
there you lie
a fern frond furled
unable to see the sun
and
I am only left
to pray

KM 12.11.99



[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 11-14-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
Michael
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1 posted 11-14-1999 06:51 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Severn, this is one of the most heartwrenching pieces I have ever read. Two lines stuck at me like daggers:

Where are the bandages for the soul...?
I sit curled in the grave of this dead leather chair.

This is so powerful and so painful. My heart goes out to you, truly.

Michael


Severn
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2 posted 11-14-1999 06:56 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Thankyou dear friend.
These have truly been the two most hellish weeks I have experienced for a very long time and my only recourse is of course the one of words.
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3 posted 11-14-1999 07:08 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Severn .. this piece is very moving. It's all too obvious that you are living it. This line is perhaps one of the most descriptive I've ever read :
'there you lie
a fern frond furled'

It is with fervant prayer that I hope you find strength for your vigil.


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4 posted 11-14-1999 08:29 AM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Severn, of all your writings that I have read (and I love them all) this is the most eloquent, moving, soul-gripping piece of all.
I am in tears.
If I can help you out in anyway, you know I will. My hugs and prayers for you and your mother...

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats

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5 posted 11-14-1999 08:36 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Severn, the enormity of your compassion is overwhelming. This is a monumental piece that I wish had never had to be written. I feel for you both and all concerned.
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6 posted 11-14-1999 09:25 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Eloquent and painful. You and your mom are in my thoughts and prayers. If you need anything, please let me know.
hoot_owl_rn
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7 posted 11-14-1999 11:31 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Wow, this left me speachless
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8 posted 11-14-1999 02:47 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

This is so moving and exquisite in its writing Severn.My heart goes out to you. Know you and your mom are in my prayers.

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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!

Severn
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9 posted 11-14-1999 06:04 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Guys, your loving responses have brought more tears to my eyes. I'll keep you updated.

Marge - due to time and circumstance I have had to be separated from my Mother now and can only pray from a distance - but she is in good hands. Thanks.

Caroline - thanks my friend, your care is heartfelt and much appreciated.

Balladeer - I too wish it never had to have been written - your term of monumental has likewise overwhelmed me! Thanks.

PdV - Yes, prayers are truly needed - to any God that exists! Thanks, it's so wonderful to have your friendship right now.

Hoot - that's a compliment if ever I have heard one - though this was written for release and not the craft. Thanks my friend.

Pepper - your sincerity is gratefully received, thanks.

[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 11-14-1999).]
Seaangel
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10 posted 11-15-1999 05:17 PM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seaangel

A moving and very evocative piece, Severn. I'm glad to hear you have the consolation of words to help you through this tough time.
Best wishes.
Martie
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11 posted 11-15-1999 05:36 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

This is a most powerful poem. I know it is an out-pouring from your heart for it's reality hurts me there. I wish at times like this that life didn't hurt. My thoughts are with you.
Severn
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12 posted 11-15-1999 05:38 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Sea - my friend, you are one of the people who has physically been here to help me through this - so thanks for your support in person dear!

Martie - thanks for your thoughts - they are needed right now!
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13 posted 01-06-2000 08:01 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Chilling depiction of the realities of life. I hope we all get to see this from the flipside and know what such confusion is like.

 Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©
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because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

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Sunshine
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14 posted 02-04-2001 08:42 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Little K....I remember reading this, but I was too overwhelmed at the time to give a worthy response....now that I know you a little better....

I send hugs....for the memories....
Severn
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15 posted 05-06-2001 11:05 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Kari...I just found this...

thank you dear..thankyou so very very much...

sigh...

My Mum is still very unwell..she survived that one..but is always sick...that November was a terrible month..many things happened..and Pip helped me survive partly...

we weren't close then...and your hugs now are just as appreciated as they would've been then

love you mama K

Little K
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16 posted 05-06-2001 01:45 PM       View Profile for coyote   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for coyote

Kamla,
The horrid "wrenching of a soul" from earth, described with such eloquence and feeling that even gods and angels cry at the hearing.
This brought back such imagery for me, the would be healer, always so helpless in the face of fate.
When my father "crossed-over", we had to decide as a family, to "pull the plug" on his life support. After the roller coaster of hopes and fears from the previous week, it was still so very, very hard.
When my grandmother "passed away" it seemed even worse. If ever there was a person whom I thought would have a "first class ticket" to the kingdom, it was her. A true Christian in the biblical sense, as sinless as one ever gets, who never said an unkind word in her life. Yet, why should she have suffered so, with cancer, and for so long? Even the dead or dying on the battlefield receive more mercy.
I guess what I'm saying is I've been there too, in the leather chair, more times than I'd care to recall, and I want ya to know that you're not alone.
Wishing you, and your Mum, the best in thought and prayer.
Billy  

"The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty."
coyote

Severn
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17 posted 05-07-2001 09:05 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Oh Coyote...you have no idea what those words mean to me...

wow - thanks for responding to this...really. That leather chair was horrible...and it isn't the first time I have sat in it, that's for sure...I'm sad and glad for your empathy at the same time...

hugs

K

All obscurity starts with a danger:
Your dangers are many. I
Cannot look much but your form suffers
Some strange injury
Sylvia Plath

Dark Angel
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18 posted 05-18-2001 01:59 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Hey K

I remember reading this, why I didn't reply then I don't know, the only thing I can think of was that is was so heartwrenching that I couldnt.

It still is K  and so terrifically written and I know your Mum came out from that then. I can only wish your Mum the best of health and happiness and I wish that for you too hon.

Many Hugs

Maree
Severn
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19 posted 05-25-2001 06:46 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Thank you Mmy dear...I love you soul-sis...and my Mum is in good hands - well taken care of.

K
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20 posted 11-11-2001 02:41 AM       View Profile for CocoBaci   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CocoBaci

Severn, your poem touched the very core of my heart and has left me overwhelmed without words...
Hugs2u
*~coco~*

 
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