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Something about her

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Martie
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Something about her

She seems so self assured,
tall and slender blond grace
behind a face of smile,
she hungers
for another place
another time
a different woman
with a real smile
and a husband
whose touch is magic
and kids who make
her proud.

She wants
what she thinks she doesn't have,
she comes and goes,
days turn to months
and age plays with her.
She does not change her face,
slip it off,
put on something comfortable
instead the corner of her smile twitches
and shifts as she turns.

A bearded round good natured
laugh, looks and sees
the beauty of her face.
He wants to hold her
and make okay her pain.
In distance they dance
around each other
denying importance
waiting for something.

He takes her with his eyes
as she pretends to ignore
what is so obvious.

At night when she dreams,
she is happy.
Curled into herself
she opens doors where
spring is always
and love is real.


[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 11-14-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 11-13-1999 08:56 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Beautifully written, Martie...one can picture her easily, as your imagery is well crafted Enjoyed the read!

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2 posted 11-13-1999 10:20 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This has a sad quality to it and so well written! Very lovely, Martie!

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3 posted 11-14-1999 06:33 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Sad but beautiful poem, Martie. I love the last stanza.

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4 posted 11-14-1999 06:43 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie, this is luring me back to read it again. Hauntingly lovely !

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Ah, you've depicted the inner thoughts of a self assured yet unfulfilled woman! Excellent!
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I can relate to this
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Excellent Martie...the imagery is wonderful......

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Beautiful, Martie.

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9 posted 11-15-1999 12:03 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

I am so pleased by the response to this portrait in a poem. Thank you for your comments.
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