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Subtlety Of Thought

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DreamEvil
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0 posted 11-13-1999 07:57 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Profoundly disturbed by the facts of life,
I reflect on the urgency of death.
I'm not one to give my wrist to the knife,
despair will never steal my final breath.

I reflect on the urgency of death,
firmly standing upon my own belief.
Despair will never steal my final breath,
life is pain so death will be sweet relief.

Firmly standing upon my own belief,
pain gives me the strength I need to endure.
Life is pain so death becomes sweet relief,
that peace carries a seductive allure.

Pain gives me the strength I need to endure,
endurance marks the turn of each season.
That peace carries a seductive allure,
sometimes lust for peace will obscure reason.

Endurance marks the turn of each season,
while I fight despair with my written word.
Sometimes lust for peace will obscure reason,
that lets my mind churn over the absurd.

While I fight despair with my written word,
I'm not one to give my wrist to the knife.
That lets my mind churn over the absurd,
profoundly disturbed by the facts of life.


©1999 DreamEvil

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
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caroline
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1 posted 11-13-1999 08:28 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

This is an excellent piece, Dream. It is a good explanation of the thought behind it.

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats

Alwye
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2 posted 11-13-1999 09:33 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

I agree with Caroline, Dream. This is truly excellent.

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3 posted 11-13-1999 10:37 PM       View Profile for moonmoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonmoon

Well done indeed DE..!
Denise
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4 posted 11-13-1999 10:45 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Well done, Dream. The pain is quite evident in this.

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Denise

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5 posted 11-13-1999 11:19 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

A glimpse into your shadows, surely. Pain is a fact of life -- as such you may rely on it. Words thoughtfully spoken.

--Kess

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You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

Julie Jordan Scott
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6 posted 11-13-1999 11:42 PM       View Profile for Julie Jordan Scott   Email Julie Jordan Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Julie Jordan Scott's Home Page   View IP for Julie Jordan Scott

Thought provoking, yet leaves me stuck in the paradox behind this word puzzle.

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Systematic Decay
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7 posted 11-14-1999 01:54 AM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

Lovely poem, Dreamie, I must agree with the opinion you express here.....however, I AM one to give my wrists to the knife, that is, if my life were to reach that point. However, I can understand where you come from......prolong the pain so that the relief is that much more joyous......

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.


Cinderella
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8 posted 11-14-1999 02:08 AM       View Profile for Cinderella   Email Cinderella   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cinderella

What an emotional poem Dream......As long as we watch the sun shine and the moon set life is worth every minute we see!
Michael
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9 posted 11-14-1999 04:04 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Very well done, Dream. I'm glad you ended this the way you did, I often worry about you at times. This is a relief to read as well as a very good poem.

Michael
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10 posted 11-14-1999 10:27 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

The poem is well done, though I don't agree with some people's fascination with the 'blade'. And I'm glad you don't either.




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11 posted 11-14-1999 02:24 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Mind over matter...
RobertB
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12 posted 11-14-1999 04:32 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

neat one....I have comments but better keep them to myself!!!!

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if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.
Munda
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13 posted 11-14-1999 04:58 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

This touches something deep inside, I forgot was there. Exellent pantoum, DreamEvil.
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14 posted 12-03-1999 11:37 AM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

Well Done....Dream!! I always enjoy reading your poetry!! This was very good!!

Bridgette

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Elizabeth Santos
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15 posted 12-03-1999 03:40 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

The cruel facts of life
Cannot be studied by a knife
So write that poetry, my friend
Pour out your sorrow with a pen
Liz

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