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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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Yesterday's goals... dim memories. Dark saddened eyes, blurring with tears. Painful scars borne; Love's history. Futures crumble when doubt appears. No brightly lit hope envisioned, When following after harsh words. Hurt soul splits in twain, partitioned. Swooned by appeal... when numbness lured. Apologies made, never bought. Price paid turned out far too costly. Though never known what would be wrought... Must walk into the night softly. One wish... only to be released. Granted... now receive this token. Words written in rhyme, love's deceased. When promises made...were broken. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Dude, you rock! Excellent slice of your inner night. Likes me much it does. Personal note, been there myself so I know how it feels ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
I have been down this road before, my friend. But there are still others leading out of despair. Do not lose hope! Hugs --Kess ------------------ You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
This is beautiful Chris.. I enjoyed it very much. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Chris, there's nothing I can say that will make you feel any better, I know, I've been there. I will say this poem cuts right to the heart, though. Wonderful, as always. Michael |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
Lovely poem, I like  ------------------ I look forward to tomorrow, while looking back on the past. But today is the day I am living. And I expect it to be a great day! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Christopher, this is an exceptionally written piece of poetry my friend. Your sadness and pain both ring loud and clear. From pain and dispear, you have created art. ------------------ Alis volat propriis (She flies with her own wings) |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I understand. A beautifully sad poem. Your talent shines even in your darkness.  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Beautifully written! |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Nice job Chris...always know your stuff will be good! |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Yes, very excellent, Chris! But they always are! ------------------ Denise |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Bud my heart breaks for you! If there's anything I can do let me know won't ya? I miss seeing ya round! HUGS to ya! I hope it gets better for soon! |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I can feel every word of this Chrisopher. I wish I could help you but anything I say will not stop the pain. We all miss you around here. Your work is always well written. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
TRY Don't give up friend. |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
wow this is heartbreakingly beautiful, hugs |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Very sad here, Christopher. I hope things brighten up for you soon. ((((HUGS)))) |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I want to thank you all for your kind responses...both to the poem and to me. I am once again humbled by the caring of the wonderful people here! Life has been, well tough, for lack of a better word to describe without pennig a novel and I really do appreciate and value each and every one of your responses. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
"...walk into the night softly".....aaahhh, Christopher, this piece nearly bleeds emotional pain. I can actually see it - very very exquisite piece here - although exquisite might seem the wrong word....intensely exquisite maybe. But as always, like DE says, you rock. Thanks for opening up a bit. I still love that line you used - powerful imagery. ------------------ ~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
I read it again, and say to heck with that LINE, the whole stanza made it happen for me! Wow - but that last line tied the knot....fabulous read Chris - and chin up in all you're going through. ------------------ ~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Chris: Keep smiling and writing and one day I'll hope to see your books on my shelf.. HUSG ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Christopher, I think Hoot said it best, well done. |
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Oscar Wilde Junior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 31San Francisco |
I feel your pain in this poem. I know I will never be as good as you...... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn! I like your mood |
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babygrrl1887 Junior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 11Toronto, Canada |
Awesome poem! I can definitely relate to it. Keep up the great work |
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