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Death by Deception
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Death by Deception |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Death by Deception ~~~***~~~ From out of shadow's depth Into her life he came bearing falsehoods on his breath Deception was his name ~~~*~~~ The lies that he created fell sweetly on her ears His every word was weighted to dissipate her fears ~~~*~~~ He spoke of endless adoration and promised her the moon Showed her such rare dedication to her passion he was attuned ~~~*~~~ At first he felt her hesitation but patience was his skill Silken lies his main vocation A sugar-coated poison pill ~~~*~~~ He coaxed her down into the dark far along betrayal's road On a liar's journey she embarked at the invitation he bestowed ~~~*~~~ She wasn't sure where his path led So he offered her directions She ignored the voices in her head And followed her affections ~~~*~~~ No one had ever made her feel the feelings that he brought Open for him, her spirit to steal then devastation he wrought ~~~*~~~ Long she wandered in belief He'd soon be by her side But hope was turned to bitter grief when she realized he had lied ~~~*~~~ There was no way she'd ever find a way to get back home Deception smiled at his design and knew his job was done ~~~*~~~ He left her there in shadow deep still wearing his welded chains Each night he visited her in sleep To remind her of the pain ~~~*~~~ Satisfied that he'd inflicted all the anguish he could impart He watched her die, addicted to the destroyer of her heart ~~~*~~~ © caroline 1999 ------------------ "Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Caroline, did I ever tell you how talented you are?! This is absolutely magnificent! And the color is perfect too!  ------------------ Denise |
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Julie Senior Member
since 1999-08-20
Posts 739Houston, TX |
Caroline, sad and lovely poem. You did a wonderful job on it. Thanks for sharing. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Caroline, WOW! this is perfect, loved it. ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Caroline my friend, you are a wondrous weaver of words. ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Caroline, beautifully presented. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
Caroline, such deaths never make it to the obituaries but they are just as real. ------------------ I look forward to tomorrow, while looking back on the past. But today is the day I am living. And I expect it to be a great day! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Excellent....we've been missing you around here, thought you went into hiding somewhere. Welcome back ------------------ Alis volat propriis (She flies with her own wings) |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Thanks everyone for your response...it means much to me. I've missed being here with all of you. I'm hopeful that the ink in my pen is not all gone Hoot~~ thanks, hon...no,not trying to hide, just trying to heal  Its working.------------------ "Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I wonder why the English language is so short on adjectives?....this work deserves so many more than I know of?....Just plain damn good gal!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
This is really great, Caroline! ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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U K Hero Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 266England |
Wish I could think of something poignant for such a top-notch poem words such as excellent and great are pretty pale same as ‘what flow’ and ‘tremendous style’ followed by words such as encore, encore, so I’ll just say TTTYG. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Bravo, my friend....most excellent!! ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
felt the stab of every stanza ------------------ if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Wow, my goodness - you keep getting better - truly! I think you have a real skill with creating moods, and setting the pace to fit them. |
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