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The Clock Spins 'Round~a villanelle

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Systematic Decay
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0 posted 11-11-1999 08:59 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Systematic Decay

(ok so its a slightly modified villanelle)

I just cannot wait to be free
From the clutches of boring school
The clock spins 'round with sleepy glee

It's nearly stopped, it's teasing me
Laughing at the impatient fool
I just cannot wait to be free

Am I the only one who can see
That time is merciless and cruel
The clock spins 'round with sleepy glee

I yell out loud, a desperate plea
That the clock's hands and I should duel
I just cannot wait to be free

The teacher stands, states her decree
Wind falls from sails, yarn from my spool
The clock spins 'round with sleepy glee

Now the dean, she wants to see me
As other kids run home from school
I just couldn't wait to be free
-And the clock still spins with sleepy glee

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.


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Denise
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1 posted 11-11-1999 09:03 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is great, Sys! I enjoyed this very much! I remember those days sitting in class staring at that clock! And now I do the same in work! (...ooops, maybe I shouldn't have told you that!)

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Hmm Maybe all the clock in our school are the same this happens to me also
nice one again Amy

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Cute
Lynn
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So true. Those clocks are so anoying during school. They seem to take their time during, but after time goes by so fast and it's time to be back in school. What's even more anoying is when you have to stay after school, and the time just slowly ticks by. -I HATE CLOCKS- (lol)
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Very cleverly written, SD, and the form is exact, almost. hehe

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This is great Amy, enjoyed the read

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Systematic Decay
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7 posted 11-12-1999 09:32 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

Thank you, everyone, for the replies. I wrote this after watching the clock in math class for about 20 minutes.

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.


H. Arlequin
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8 posted 11-19-1999 08:06 PM       View Profile for H. Arlequin   Email H. Arlequin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit H. Arlequin's Home Page   View IP for H. Arlequin

HA applauds
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I know what you mean!
 
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