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Balladeer
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0 posted 1999-11-11 01:43 AM


The mountain stood within my sight
With jagged peaks that reached so high
They hid the twinkling stars at night
Embedded in the summer sky.

And, high upon the mountain's face
Clear waterfalls cascaded down
The side until they reached the base
To water fruit trees in the ground.

So held in awe, so struck was I
By this stone monument I spied
I bid my hill a fond farewell
And journeyed to the mountain's side.

But, as I stood there at the base,
The mountain did not seem so high
It's trees were barren, void of fruit
And water falls ran dry.

Then, as I stared into the nigh
Across the lonesome valley floor,
A mountain stood within my sight...
The hill I'd known before.

Now, sitting on that valley floor,
I am forced to pay the cost
For the hill that I thought mountainous
And the mountain that I lost.

© Copyright 1999 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Kelly
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1 posted 1999-11-11 03:33 AM


Simply beautiful.
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2 posted 1999-11-11 06:24 AM


Balladeer, this is lovely.
Reminds me of the greener pastuures we all wish to graze in, then find barren and brown when we venture over.

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Toerag
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3 posted 1999-11-11 07:16 AM




Balladeer, Very fine work here again, as always...(Please note there is not a single "cut" or "put down" associated with this response to this fine poet)......

[This message has been edited by Toerag (edited 11-11-1999).]

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4 posted 1999-11-11 07:46 AM


There are 2 names I can see in the list and know there's a treat waiting just a click away... Neither have ever disappointed... Yours is one, Balladeer... Wonderful poem... as always! *S*
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5 posted 1999-11-11 08:25 AM


Balladeer,
So that old proverb about the greener grass is not true. Excellent as usual.

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6 posted 1999-11-11 08:56 AM


Again, you have done it again! You are fast climbing my all time favorite "reads" list! Wonderful poem.
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7 posted 1999-11-11 09:13 AM


I think this is wonderful! And a lesson snuck in there also.

Pepper
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8 posted 1999-11-11 09:31 AM


Wonderful poem and message 'Deer.....

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9 posted 1999-11-11 09:52 AM


Great work, 'Deer, but please tell me, was this a repost? I thought I had read this before...but I could be wrong. I just don't want to think I'm suffering from early stages of senility.

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Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


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10 posted 1999-11-11 09:58 AM


Wonderful as always my friend. Your talent shines through like the suns rays through the clouds.
Ruth

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(She flies with her own wings)

Martie
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11 posted 1999-11-11 10:12 AM


Simply beautiful and I like the philosophy.
Fred Hobbs
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12 posted 1999-11-11 11:38 AM


Balladeer, Excellent as always. Very unique perspective.
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13 posted 1999-11-11 11:49 AM


I'm running out of words, so for once I say it in Dutch. ; )
Een buitengewoon goed gedicht ! ; )

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14 posted 1999-11-11 12:06 PM


Great poem, 'Deer. It's always a pleasure reading you work.
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15 posted 1999-11-11 12:43 PM


Bal: What can I say that hasn't already been said...I'm glad the words came back..

HUSG

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Andrew Scott
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16 posted 1999-11-11 01:39 PM


Sir Balladeer: Shadows of F1... I believe this was one of my earlier introductions to your work, a piece that begged me to seek out more of your fine poetry. Always a pleasure to read.
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17 posted 1999-11-11 02:24 PM


My warm thanks to you all.

Toerag, it has been duly noted. One thing that separates great witty people and others is knowing when to use it. You excel in that which makes you a real class act. LongJohn, you're right there with him.


Sunshine and Andrew, yep, shades of the very early days of Open #1. Thank you for remembering.

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18 posted 1999-11-11 05:07 PM


Gorgeous my friend.
RobertB
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19 posted 1999-11-11 05:13 PM


very good!! I am in awe of your use of such meter and rhyme. I used to do it that way so long ago...but abandoned it for the easy way!!!

RB

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20 posted 1999-11-11 07:59 PM


It's quite true, never a disappointment when your name is attached! Loved it!

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Denise


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21 posted 1999-11-19 08:00 PM


Denise got it right!!

wd

HA

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22 posted 2008-06-02 02:51 AM


This remains as beautiful as when you wrote it.

Alison

PS - yes, I am avoiding my lessons tonight.  It's too hard (laughs).  I'll work on it tomorrow.

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23 posted 2008-06-02 08:02 AM


Thank you, Alison..


Yes, I know it is. The reward is in the effort and you are never short on that. Good luck!

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