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Balladeer
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0 posted 11-11-1999 01:43 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

The mountain stood within my sight
With jagged peaks that reached so high
They hid the twinkling stars at night
Embedded in the summer sky.

And, high upon the mountain's face
Clear waterfalls cascaded down
The side until they reached the base
To water fruit trees in the ground.

So held in awe, so struck was I
By this stone monument I spied
I bid my hill a fond farewell
And journeyed to the mountain's side.

But, as I stood there at the base,
The mountain did not seem so high
It's trees were barren, void of fruit
And water falls ran dry.

Then, as I stared into the nigh
Across the lonesome valley floor,
A mountain stood within my sight...
The hill I'd known before.

Now, sitting on that valley floor,
I am forced to pay the cost
For the hill that I thought mountainous
And the mountain that I lost.
© Copyright 1999 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Kelly
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1 posted 11-11-1999 03:33 AM       View Profile for Kelly   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kelly

Simply beautiful.
Marge Tindal
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2 posted 11-11-1999 06:24 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Balladeer, this is lovely.
Reminds me of the greener pastuures we all wish to graze in, then find barren and brown when we venture over.

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Toerag
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3 posted 11-11-1999 07:16 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag



Balladeer, Very fine work here again, as always...(Please note there is not a single "cut" or "put down" associated with this response to this fine poet)......

[This message has been edited by Toerag (edited 11-11-1999).]
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4 posted 11-11-1999 07:46 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

There are 2 names I can see in the list and know there's a treat waiting just a click away... Neither have ever disappointed... Yours is one, Balladeer... Wonderful poem... as always! *S*
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5 posted 11-11-1999 08:25 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Balladeer,
So that old proverb about the greener grass is not true. Excellent as usual.
Deb Lynne
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6 posted 11-11-1999 08:56 AM       View Profile for Deb Lynne   Email Deb Lynne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Deb Lynne

Again, you have done it again! You are fast climbing my all time favorite "reads" list! Wonderful poem.
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7 posted 11-11-1999 09:13 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I think this is wonderful! And a lesson snuck in there also.
Pepper
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8 posted 11-11-1999 09:31 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Wonderful poem and message 'Deer.....

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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!

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Great work, 'Deer, but please tell me, was this a repost? I thought I had read this before...but I could be wrong. I just don't want to think I'm suffering from early stages of senility.

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Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

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Wonderful as always my friend. Your talent shines through like the suns rays through the clouds.
Ruth

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Alis volat propriis
(She flies with her own wings)
Martie
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11 posted 11-11-1999 10:12 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Simply beautiful and I like the philosophy.
Fred Hobbs
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Balladeer, Excellent as always. Very unique perspective.
Munda
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13 posted 11-11-1999 11:49 AM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

I'm running out of words, so for once I say it in Dutch. ; )
Een buitengewoon goed gedicht ! ; )
LngJhnAg
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14 posted 11-11-1999 12:06 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Great poem, 'Deer. It's always a pleasure reading you work.
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15 posted 11-11-1999 12:43 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Bal: What can I say that hasn't already been said...I'm glad the words came back..

HUSG

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Andrew Scott
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16 posted 11-11-1999 01:39 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Sir Balladeer: Shadows of F1... I believe this was one of my earlier introductions to your work, a piece that begged me to seek out more of your fine poetry. Always a pleasure to read.
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17 posted 11-11-1999 02:24 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

My warm thanks to you all.

Toerag, it has been duly noted. One thing that separates great witty people and others is knowing when to use it. You excel in that which makes you a real class act. LongJohn, you're right there with him.


Sunshine and Andrew, yep, shades of the very early days of Open #1. Thank you for remembering.
Marilyn
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Gorgeous my friend.
RobertB
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very good!! I am in awe of your use of such meter and rhyme. I used to do it that way so long ago...but abandoned it for the easy way!!!

RB

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if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.
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20 posted 11-11-1999 07:59 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

It's quite true, never a disappointment when your name is attached! Loved it!

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Denise

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21 posted 11-19-1999 08:00 PM       View Profile for H. Arlequin   Email H. Arlequin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit H. Arlequin's Home Page   View IP for H. Arlequin

Denise got it right!!

wd

HA
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22 posted 06-02-2008 02:51 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

This remains as beautiful as when you wrote it.

Alison

PS - yes, I am avoiding my lessons tonight.  It's too hard (laughs).  I'll work on it tomorrow.
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23 posted 06-02-2008 08:02 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Thank you, Alison..


Yes, I know it is. The reward is in the effort and you are never short on that. Good luck!
 
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