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It really wasn't long ago....

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Denise
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0 posted 11-10-1999 10:50 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Denise

More bright, by far, we knew we were
Than generations past
All times before us but a blur
Dark ages gone at last.

We simply were superior
How could one not agree
Minds prior just inferior
World's saviour we would be.

Fine words we spoke, pure gems of gold
Were treasures to be sure
Discarding tarnished trinkets old
We stomped them on the floor.

Invented peace and love, you know
To justice we gave birth
It wasn't all that long ago
Our truth would save the earth.

The lessons found in joy and strife
Can teach us many things
Time's classroom that is known as life
Humility it brings.

Experience bestowed its touch
Here's wisdom youth can glean
I didn't really know so much
...When I was seventeen.

(made a few changes and added a stanza)
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Denise

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1 posted 11-10-1999 11:06 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Wasn't it only last year??? Yep, things have changed since we were that age alright (SIGH). Great piece Denise

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2 posted 11-10-1999 11:06 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Wasn't it only last year??? Yep, things have changed since we were that age alright (SIGH). Great piece Denise

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~Isis~
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3 posted 11-10-1999 11:17 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

For me it's only going to be next year... (sigh)! Great poem as always! Love the meter and rhyme!
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4 posted 11-10-1999 11:18 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

sheesh... talk about giving someone mid-life crisis... yep... that was us.. save the world... we did a great job didnt we...
excellent poem as usual Denise...
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5 posted 11-10-1999 11:43 PM       View Profile for jenmarie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jenmarie

great poem - very much enjoyed - seventeen was my favorite year which is not saying much since it was only three and a half years ago - but i loved it
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Denise....Wonderful, as always.
hoot_owl_rn
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7 posted 11-11-1999 09:47 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Hey, It was just last year for me ;-)

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Alis volat propriis
(She flies with her own wings)
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8 posted 11-11-1999 11:30 AM       View Profile for Fred Hobbs   Email Fred Hobbs   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Fred Hobbs's Home Page   View IP for Fred Hobbs

Nice job Denise. I can't even remember seventeen. Really well crafted and entertaining.

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9 posted 11-11-1999 12:00 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

O my, now I really feel old ! ; ) Great poem Denise. : )
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10 posted 11-11-1999 07:39 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Isis- yep it was just last year!
Master- enjoy it, it goes fast!
Mike- yep, we did a great job didn't we?
Jenmarie- read the comment to Master!
Lynn- Thanks!
Hoot- Wow, you've accomplished a lot in your short lifetime!
Fred- I don't remember it either, I was just making it all up!
Munda- You and me both!

Thanks everybody for reading and commenting!

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Denise

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11 posted 11-12-1999 11:23 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I made lots and lots of changes to this and I wanted to know what you all thought.
Thanks!
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Denise



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12 posted 11-12-1999 11:32 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

LOved it Denise....ummmm how old are you. how much do you weigh and how much do you make a year??

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if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.
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13 posted 11-13-1999 12:03 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

hehehehe....you are so funny Robert!
hmmmmm...let's see:

1) Not as young as I used to be.
2) Fluctuates, but hubby loves me anyway!
3) Is it ever enough?!

Thanks for the kind comment! I'm glad you liked it!

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Denise



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14 posted 11-13-1999 12:10 AM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

Very nice, Denise.

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.


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15 posted 11-13-1999 01:12 AM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

At seventeen we could do anything...even change the world Now I'm just busy changing my hair from gray to...uh..well whatever color is catchin' my eye this time !!

Great one Denise, as always!

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats

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16 posted 11-13-1999 11:50 AM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

Loved the poem, Denise. When I was 17 I thought I could whip the world with a broom straw. Now need broom straw to clean up the messes I've made. LOL

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17 posted 11-13-1999 12:21 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Denise .. a memory-shaker for sure.
At seventeen ... I couldn't wait to be twenty-two. And now ... I wonder where all those challenges went and if I met them ... and if I'd remember anyway !

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Denise....nicely done...Being almost 18 now, I can relate to this very well.....LOL
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Seventeen, yup, I think I was there once, let me get out my calculator. At seventeen I had to do all my counting on my fingers. Great poem Denise!
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20 posted 11-13-1999 12:48 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Geesh! I feel like such an ole geezer now... being almost 29. *G* Great poem!!
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21 posted 11-13-1999 04:56 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Sys- Thanks!
Caroline- Yep, we sure thought we could!
Ohme- Me too!
Marge- Me too!
Toerag-Say what?!
Martie- Thanks!
Suthern- 29? Thanks, now I really feel old!

Thanks for all your lovely comments!

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Denise

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22 posted 11-13-1999 05:43 PM       View Profile for Tara Simms   Email Tara Simms   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tara Simms's Home Page   View IP for Tara Simms

I loved this Denise. You did well at capturing the feeling of invincibility that runs rampant in teens! I'm 25 now. The other night I was fondly looking back to my teenage years when I wanted to make a difference in the world. Luckily, I have a job that allows me to do that with the teens I now work with. Great job!
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Thanks, Tara! Geesh, 25! Am I the oldest person around this neck of the woods?!

I'm glad you liked it!

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Denise

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24 posted 11-19-1999 08:14 PM       View Profile for H. Arlequin   Email H. Arlequin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit H. Arlequin's Home Page   View IP for H. Arlequin

HA applauds!
 
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