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Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

0 posted 1999-11-10 04:03 PM

Joel’s Blood

Pale as hopelessness,
this house of skin and bones
is a prison,
an invisible jail
where coming and going
is timed
to the tainting and cleaning
of blood.

Is the soul, imprisoned in
his battered skin
also, taped by despair
to the bed where he
exposes his retched veins?

In each bag are
elixirs of hope,
two, three times a day.
No guarantees.

He is not made from
concentrate, he is fortified.
Will his shelf life
free him from waiting
in this desperate line
for used parts?

RSEvans
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since 1999-10-23

Posts 1147
Tulsa, OK, USA

1 posted 1999-11-10 04:05 PM

Watched my uncle drift away like this from cancer. We sometimes prayed for him to die so he wouldn't be in pain any longer. Powerful images.

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Once I was brilliant, now I no longer shine, but the twinkle in my eye speaks of another time.

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

2 posted 1999-11-10 05:00 PM

Few things can be worse that dialysis. I feel for all that have to endure it. Good poem, Martie.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 1999-11-10 10:42 PM

Martie,
Agree with Balladeer. Well done.

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

4 posted 1999-11-11 09:41 AM

Martie,
I am at a loss of words for this one. You have described it wonderfully in all it's pain and feeling of helplessness. This is an extreamly well written and heartfelt piece of poetry. BRAVO!!!
Ruth

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Alis volat propriis
(She flies with her own wings)

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

5 posted 1999-11-11 10:08 AM

I appreciate your comments and thought you'd like to know that Joel got a new kidney and is now much better.

Pepper
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since 1999-08-19

Posts 3079
Southern Florida

6 posted 1999-11-11 11:27 AM

Very moving piece Martie....
Glad to hear that Joel is doing better.

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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!

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