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Mike
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0 posted 11-10-1999 09:20 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mike

Hand carved cradle, wooden floor,
...hewn from timbered oak,
"Four score and seven years ago,"
...Emancipator spoke.

At Sumpter's Fort, death's evil sword,
...slashed the state in twain,
Shearing through the bond's of man,
...as had the brother Cain.

Two brothers born on cabin floor,
...shared cradle and a name,
Yankee Doodle, Johnny Reb,
...were not they one the same.

Mini-balls and sabre's thrust,
...a charge up Picket's Hill,
In fading light of evening's mist,
...Cain did his brother kill.

The flower of a nation,
...touched by Reaper's hand,
Yankee Doodle went to town,
...Look away, Dixieland.



[This message has been edited by Mike (edited 11-10-1999).]
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Watcher666
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1 posted 11-10-1999 10:20 AM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Well done.Enjoyed the read!

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Excellent post Mike, well done

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Mike
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3 posted 11-10-1999 06:04 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Thank ya both kindly... appreciate the comments.
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4 posted 11-10-1999 06:47 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Great poem, Mike. I like the way you brought out the perspective of brother against brother in terms of Cain and Abel. On a braoder scale, aren't all wars like that?
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5 posted 11-10-1999 07:33 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Mike, this is awesome. I relive the events through your words.

The thin red line
of blood was spilled,
when brothers fought
at Picket's Hill.
The valley floors
now covered red,
with blood from
Yankee Doodle and Johnny Reb.

Valleys flooded now
with a mother's tears ...
When war rears
it's ugly head
all we have left
are the dead.

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6 posted 11-10-1999 08:02 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Mike,
Enjoyed, well done.
Denise
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Most excellent, Mike!

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8 posted 11-11-1999 09:19 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Thank you all for the very gracious comments.
Sitting here a little reflecting on veterans day. We now have a generation who have such a different perspective on war; who think wars are fought with no casualties or suffering on our part. May they never have to live through a real war.
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9 posted 11-11-1999 08:12 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

You've woven this metaphor beautifully, my friend.... I love it...
 
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