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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Hand carved cradle, wooden floor, ...hewn from timbered oak, "Four score and seven years ago," ...Emancipator spoke. At Sumpter's Fort, death's evil sword, ...slashed the state in twain, Shearing through the bond's of man, ...as had the brother Cain. Two brothers born on cabin floor, ...shared cradle and a name, Yankee Doodle, Johnny Reb, ...were not they one the same. Mini-balls and sabre's thrust, ...a charge up Picket's Hill, In fading light of evening's mist, ...Cain did his brother kill. The flower of a nation, ...touched by Reaper's hand, Yankee Doodle went to town, ...Look away, Dixieland. [This message has been edited by Mike (edited 11-10-1999).] |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Well done.Enjoyed the read! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Excellent post Mike, well done  ------------------ Alis volat propriis (She flies with her own wings) |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Thank ya both kindly... appreciate the comments. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Great poem, Mike. I like the way you brought out the perspective of brother against brother in terms of Cain and Abel. On a braoder scale, aren't all wars like that? |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mike, this is awesome. I relive the events through your words. The thin red line of blood was spilled, when brothers fought at Picket's Hill. The valley floors now covered red, with blood from Yankee Doodle and Johnny Reb. Valleys flooded now with a mother's tears ... When war rears it's ugly head all we have left are the dead. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mike, Enjoyed, well done. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Most excellent, Mike! ------------------ Denise |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Thank you all for the very gracious comments. Sitting here a little reflecting on veterans day. We now have a generation who have such a different perspective on war; who think wars are fought with no casualties or suffering on our part. May they never have to live through a real war. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You've woven this metaphor beautifully, my friend.... I love it... |
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