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Reverting To Roosevelt

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LRAW
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Reverting To Roosevelt

It is a risk,
or so they say
To love a girl
Born twelve years this day

Her body untouched
and her spirit so bright
to hold in my arms
brings peace through the night

I know it's a sin
I'm ten years her senior
but life is not living
when I am not near her

To me, dear friends
the end's not her shout
but to take her to Cuba
where out love will lack doubt

The question is now
do I steal her away
or remain just her cousin
and visit on holiday's
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LRAW
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1 posted 11-10-1999 12:02 AM       View Profile for LRAW   Email LRAW   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LRAW

There is a typing error in it, it should be in the second fourth stanza, the last line it should say "Where our love will lack doubt" not "Where out love will lack doubt" Sorry
LRAW
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Sorry there is a typing error in the reply i made. Here is the real error in the poem. The fourth stanza, last line, It should read :"Where our love will lack doubt" not "where out love will lack doubt"

Sorry once again
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Interesting.Well written

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