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LRAW
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since 1999-11-06
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0 posted 1999-11-10 12:00 PM


Reverting To Roosevelt

It is a risk,
or so they say
To love a girl
Born twelve years this day

Her body untouched
and her spirit so bright
to hold in my arms
brings peace through the night

I know it's a sin
I'm ten years her senior
but life is not living
when I am not near her

To me, dear friends
the end's not her shout
but to take her to Cuba
where out love will lack doubt

The question is now
do I steal her away
or remain just her cousin
and visit on holiday's

© Copyright 1999 LRAW - All Rights Reserved
LRAW
Junior Member
since 1999-11-06
Posts 15

1 posted 1999-11-10 12:02 PM


There is a typing error in it, it should be in the second fourth stanza, the last line it should say "Where our love will lack doubt" not "Where out love will lack doubt" Sorry
LRAW
Junior Member
since 1999-11-06
Posts 15

2 posted 1999-11-10 12:04 PM


Sorry there is a typing error in the reply i made. Here is the real error in the poem. The fourth stanza, last line, It should read :"Where our love will lack doubt" not "where out love will lack doubt"

Sorry once again

Watcher666
Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606

3 posted 1999-11-10 04:10 AM


Interesting.Well written

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

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