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Alone, an Awful Place To Be
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Alone, an Awful Place To Be |
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John Yaws Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 860Texas 
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Alone, an Awful Place Alone....an awful place to be- Like barren islands in the sea- No vestige there of love or life- Where winds of sorrow like a knife... Do carve away the sentiment- Too late you wonder where it went- And tears upon a face of stone- Thus bleeds the heart which dwells alone. Alone...the moon a sentinel- To oversee where lovers dwell, Does gaze in sorrow from his home, At couples as he dwells alone. And as he orbits, above me- We share a forlorn misery- He'll still be here when I am gone- To occupy some grave...alone. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Magnificent! ------------------ Denise |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Okay, how does one compete with that one?  |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Excellent! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Very good verse, but I do not entirely agree with thew sentiment of it. Alone can be a wondrous state of being. ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This was good. As I read it a few times, I exchanged "sentiment" with "sediment", and you know what? That works, too! Enjoy your work a lot. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I love those little malaprops.... and Gunslinger is pretty awesome too.... |
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