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Alone, an Awful Place To Be

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John Yaws
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0 posted 11-09-1999 08:46 PM       View Profile for John Yaws   Email John Yaws   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit John Yaws's Home Page   View IP for John Yaws

Alone, an Awful Place

Alone....an awful place to be-
Like barren islands in the sea-
No vestige there of love or life-
Where winds of sorrow like a knife...

Do carve away the sentiment-
Too late you wonder where it went-
And tears upon a face of stone-
Thus bleeds the heart which dwells alone.

Alone...the moon a sentinel-
To oversee where lovers dwell,
Does gaze in sorrow from his home,
At couples as he dwells alone.

And as he orbits, above me-
We share a forlorn misery-
He'll still be here when I am gone-
To occupy some grave...alone.
© Copyright 1999 John R. Yaws - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 11-09-1999 10:51 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Magnificent!

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hoot_owl_rn
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Okay, how does one compete with that one?
Watcher666
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Excellent!

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DreamEvil
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4 posted 11-10-1999 05:30 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Very good verse, but I do not entirely agree with thew sentiment of it. Alone can be a wondrous state of being.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
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5 posted 11-10-1999 11:06 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

This was good. As I read it a few times, I exchanged "sentiment" with "sediment", and you know what? That works, too!

Enjoy your work a lot.
Nan
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I love those little malaprops.... and Gunslinger is pretty awesome too....
 
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